海淀一二写作新.ppt

情景作文课例设计 海淀一模情景作文：志愿服务 海淀二模情景：图表 假设你是红星中学高二（1）班的学生李华，请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，为校刊“英语园地”写一篇短文，记述寒假期间你在中国国家博物馆做志愿讲解员的经历。 海淀一模情景作文：志愿服务 阅卷发现的问题 完全无视所给的首句 时间逻辑不合理 详略无当 句式单一，词级很低 要点和细节不清，应该先要点后细节 文章的流畅性，逻辑性不好 （结尾升华不搭：如 where?there‘s?a will?there’s a way） 设计重点：文章结构和语言提升 设计思路： 一：明确要点，时间逻辑，结构详略 二：自省 ， 三：精彩要点和范文表达分享： 同一多个 四：改善：二稿， 五：互评，打分 1.学生分享，打分 2.老师再打分 内容要点与必要细节 1．申请 网上申请 略 2．参加培训 培训内容 详 3．讲解 讲解主题 详 4．获得表彰 称号、心情 略 5.感受 （ 要恰当，有画龙点睛之效） 内容要点与时间逻辑 1．申请 寒假之前 2．参加培训 寒假伊始 3．讲解 培训之后 4．获得表彰 寒假结束 海淀一模情景作文语料举例及使用： 1.Soon came the day when I had to put what I had learnt into practice.徐璐 2.Pushed by the willingness of helping others, I decided to do some voluntary work.王静竹 3.No longer after I handed in my application form , I received an e-mail which informed me to attend a training course. 王静竹 优秀范文举例 During this winter vacation, I worked as a volunteer guide in the National Museum of China. First, as instructed, I filled the application form carefully on line. Days later, I was informed that I was admitted and was required to attend an introducing course which was about how to be a perfect and professional guide. Having been trained with all the necessary information, I finally got my first show as a volunteer guide, nervous but fluent. After days of practice, getting dressed and wearing a microphone, I also gave a vivid introduction of the Silk Road, impressing my visitors deeply. Eventually came the end of my voluntary . Due to my outstanding performance, I was rewarded as “Excellent Volunteer”. Nothing makes me happier than my capability was recognized by others, especially, when I’ve devoted all my effort. I will always cherish this significance experience. 二稿写作 考试说明： 书面表达提供必要的提示，提示的形式有文字、图画、图表等。 海淀二模情景：图表 假设你是红星中学的学生会主席李华（最近，你就三个景点进行了“我最喜欢的春游地点”的调查。请根据下面