写作指导·(二)怎样写地方介绍文.ppt

* 写作指导·（二）怎样写地方介绍文 一、写作任务 请阅读下面表格，写一篇介绍你所在城市的短文。 二、学生习作 Hello！I’m Wang Fang. Now, I’d like to introduce our city-Jianghai City to you. Our city faces with①the Changjiang River on the south and the East Sea on the east. It has an area of 10,000 square kilometers and it has a population of five millions②. And much to our pride, it has a long history of more than 1,000 years. You can come to our city by land, by water or by air, which is very convenient. At the same time, our city is also a beautiful city with many rivers and lakes in it. Besides, there are many place of interests③in our city. As you can imagine, the people in our city are kind and honest and they are always ready to help the④others. To our delight, both agriculture and industry develop very fastly⑤in our city and people have a rich and harmonious life. 三、名师点评 错误评析： ①faces 表示“面临”时为及物动词，应去掉with。 ②数词后面接量词时量词应用单数，因此millions 应改为million。 ③a place of interest 的复数为places of interest，因此place of interests 应改为places of interest。 ④此处表示“别人”，为泛指，因此应去掉other 前面的the。 ⑤fast 本身可做副词，因此fastly 应改为fast。 2. 亮点展示： ①文章要点虽多，但小作者有序加以表达，没有一点乱的感觉。 ②now, at the same time, besides, as you can imagine 等过渡性词汇的使用使 文章叙述更合理，行文更连贯，逻辑更严密。 ③much to our pride, always, to our delight 等情感性词汇的使用增强了文章的 感染度。 四、写作指导 1.明确主旨，确定要点，谋划结构 该文是介绍某地情况。要点有：自然状况、社会状况、经济状况。结构：首尾段为开头、结尾，中间几段介绍情况。结尾段可要可不要。 2. 正确使用时态，提高语言的准确性 地方介绍式书面表达在时态上颇有特点。介绍地方位置、面积、人口、历史、交通、风景、社会状况、经济状况等现状性要点应用一般现在时。介绍地方过去情况应用一般过去时。介绍地方发展前景应用一般将来时。 3. 灵活使用常见表达法和句型，提高表达档次 地方介绍式书面表达不少语言是有规律出现的，如介绍地方位置、面积、人口、历史、交通状况、风景都有一些常见句型（见模板）。 另外，介绍地方建筑物可用There are many buildings in my / our ..., such as ..., ... and ...。或There are quite a few buildings in my / our ..., like ..., ... and ...。文首对地方进行简要介绍可用My / Our ... is a / an ...。文末对地方进行总结可用Such is my / our ..., a / an ... and ...。介绍地方每年参观人数可用Over ... people come to visit my / our ... On average a year. 或Every year, more than ... visitors come to my /