无老师作文巨堂合集+使用指南.doc

2013年1月无老师精析：其实当我们在阅读作文的时候，总是会发现，我们与优秀作文的差距貌似不简简单单是用词的差距。而是同样的一句话，我们是这么说的，但是人家是那么说的。我们写的方式总是把我们脑中的中文，逐字的翻译成英文。但是实际上，慢慢的我们应该做的是将我们脑中的意思，找到英文地道的表达方式，然后直接表达出来，这是一个循序渐进的过程。 无老师满分范例: Also, students would easily become disoriented in the huge sea of information. Although modern technology could equip us with easy access to information, the huge amount of resources would actually leave us discombobulated. Therefore, it is only left to possess information more quickly rather than learn it more quickly. An illustrating example is my experience with a HK digital library which stores almost all the books I desire. At first I enjoyed downloading them from the database. However, one month later I ended up with hundreds of books stored in my hardware yet none of them finished or ever clicked. 无老师优秀中文翻译:同样的,学生将会很容易的变得没有方向,在海量的信息面前。虽然当代的技术使得我们可以很容易的接触到信息，但是大量的信息会使得我们乱了方向。因此，我们只是更快的获得了这些信息，而不是更快的掌握了这些信息。一个最能说明问题的例子就是我在香港数字图书馆的经历，这个图书馆几乎储藏了所有我喜欢的书。最初，我喜欢从数据库下载这些信息。但是，一个月后，当数百本书被储存在我的硬件里，但是没有任何一本书被读完甚至都没有被点击过之后，我就终结了我的行为。 无老师平庸范例：Also, when we face plenty of information, students would easily lost their direction. Although the modern technology helps us get more information, so much information will distract us. So we just collect these information, but we do not absorb these information. The best example is the my experience in the HK digital library, this library almost have all the books that I like. At first, I liked to download these information. However, after a month, when hundreds of books were stored in my hardware and none of them were opened or even were clicked, I stop stopped this behavior. 首先第一句：优秀范例Also, students would easily become disoriented in the huge sea of information.对比平庸范例Also, when we face plenty of information, students would easily lost their direction.我们就会发现人家优秀范例明明几个词就可以搞定的事情，平庸范例竟然用了一个从句！真是啰嗦！这里的优秀范例显然首先是become disoriented这里的disoriented这个合成词写的很形象，orient本身就是有“指引方向”的意思，前面加上了dis表示方向的迷失，然后再接下来有用了huge sea of，还真有一点mountain people， mountain sea的赶脚。O(∩_∩)O哈哈~平庸范