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原文：有些事一转身就是一辈子。译文：There are things once you turn away you turn a lifetime.点评：作为标题，要简明扼要，能够一下子逮住读者的目光。用短句，用一些能够让读者感到熟悉、容易产生联想的短语，更能激发读者的阅读兴趣。 “Now or Never”是一首流行歌曲的名字，用在这里正适合。建议译为： It’s now or never – Once you walk away, it is a life time!原文：有些人一直没机会见，等有机会见了，却又犹豫了，相见不如不见。译文：There are people whom you never have chance to see, yet when chance comes, you hesitate reckoning that seeing is not better than not seeing.点评：这里用meet 比用see 更贴切，让你犹豫的不是看见他，而是与他相会。建议译为：There are people you would have never thought to meet, and yet, when the opportunity arrives, you hesitate and would rather not to.? 原文：有些事一直没机会做，等有机会了，却不想再做了。译文：There are things which you never have no chance to do, yet when chance comes, you do not want to do any more.点评：“一直没机会做”是一层的否定意思，never have no chance 用两个否定，意思错误；去掉which的定语从句，更为精简；chance多指偶然的机会，含有侥幸的意味在内；opportunity多指特殊的机会，含有期待的意味，在此处用opportunity较为妥当；you do not want 后面的宾语应为opportunity，为want “the opportunity”,因此，改want to do为want it；no more比not any more更为简约、否定更为强烈；yet做“但是，却”的意思时为连词，用and yet。建议译为：There are things you have never had the chance to do, and yet, when the opportunity comes, you want it no more. 原文：有些事。错过了。就是没缘分。抓住了。就是幸福译文：There are things once missed, you have no fortune; once seized, you have got happiness.点评：用There be句型稍显累赘，去掉更好；you have no fortune是中式英语的说法，不地道，此处意译“没缘分”为（Things may have）meant to be fateful，意味深长；grasp较seize，更具“紧握，紧抓”的含义，表露出原文内在的意义；miss out 在字典中为to fail to use or enjoy an opportunity,而miss在当“错过”讲的时候，意为To let go by，后面多跟“opportunity或chance”，这里也要请教，该用哪个呢？建议译为：Things you missed out may have meant to be fateful.? Once grasped, it is your happiness. ? 原文：有些话埋藏在心中好久，没机会说，等有机会说的时候，却说不出口了。译文：There are words that buried long time in mind with no chance to say, yet when chance comes, it is hard to speak out.点评：埋藏在心中，用heart，而非mind，因在英文中，mind刚突出思维、思想、头脑，而heart更偏重情感；改后的deep inside heart，意为“埋在心底”，更体现原文中埋藏的意味，为原文增益；在英文习惯中，buried long time（动词+状语）不如long buried这种副词+动词的形式常用；speak out更突出的是“大声的说出口”，而speechless（无言）更为提切“说不出口”。建议译为：There ar