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Writing The 1st day Ⅰ.Requirements 写作四大要求： 1.内容切题、表达正确；要避免段落的部分跑题现象。 2.文理通顺、前后连贯；要注意句句之间、段段之间的过渡手法。 3.无重大语言错误。 4.用词丰富、结构灵活；宁肯意思重复，表达不宜重复。 ⑴内容切题 Title: Making Friends Outline: 1.The need for friends 2.True friendship 3.My principle in making friends The former paragraph has shown my principle in making friends in some way. Furthermore, what I want to say is that one good friend is enough. (某同学的第三段，本段不好：划线部分的内容造成了他的结构造成了文章的结构不清晰。但无语言错误和跑题现象。) When I choose friends, I do not care what work they When的时间状语从句 否定句 what的宾语从句 do or which social backgrounds they are from, but I 并列句 宾语从句 转折 do notice those little things which reveal one’s do表强调 限定性定语从句 characters. I would make sure that we really care for 宾语从句 each other, so that no matter how much times goes by so that结果状语从句 without seeing each other, I know my friends will without的妙用 always be there, ready to help if I need them. And 形容词的妙用 if从句 I know we are true friends indeed. （★满分作文。第二段，共有14处闪光点。值得熟读+背诵） ⑵文理通顺 As the proverb goes, a friend in need is a friend 过渡 引用谚语 in deed. We hope to have friends, but not fair-weather ①前后平行结构，短小精悍 ②ones代替friends ones. A true friend should be one that can be trusted should be one that…even结构 even when we are in trouble. The value of true friendship presents itself only when it is tempered by 意思：磨练 hardship. （★满分作文。第二段。熟读+背诵） Title: Bicycles---An Important Transportation Means in China Outline: 1.Why bicycles are popular in China 2.Bicycles and Cars 3.Future of bicycles in China The bicycle will be remained for a long time in china but in the end it will be disappeared with the improval of people’s living level (文章第三段。该段有多处错误，已用波浪线标出。The bicycle是特指某辆自行车应改为Bicycles；其次，remain和dis