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满分TOEFL综合写作秘诀（3） 3分vs.4分，PK的是心态！ 我们先一起来ETS提供的3分作文。OG P256 Score 3 ResponseThe lecturer provide the opposite opinion concerning what the article offered. The team work often bring negative effect. As we all know superficially, team work and team spirits are quite popular in todays business world and also the fashionable terms.However, the lecturer find deeper and hiding results.Firstly, the working results of team members cant be fully valued. For example, if a team member does nothing in the process of team discussion, decision making -and final pratice, his or her work deliquency will not be recognized because we only emphasize team work. Also, the real excellent and creative members work might be obliterated for the same reason. ? Secondly, the team work might lose its value when team members are leading by several influential people in the group. One to the essential merits of team is to avoid the individule wrong. But one or two influential or persuasive people will make the team useless.Thirdly, team work often become the excuse of taking responsibility. All in charge, nobody care. All in all, what we should do is the fully distinguish the advantages and disadvantages of a concept or widely used method. That is to keep the common sense.感觉这位考生英文水平如何？不少中国学习者有“仅以词汇论英雄”的倾向，根据这一逻辑，这篇作文似乎不算差——作者能用的词汇从superficially到deliquency，从emphasize 到obliterate。但它只有三分，因为它完全符合三分作文的模样 —— 漏掉了一个信息点：quick vs. not quick。 ? 再一起来看看该同学“Thirdly…”这一段。很短：只有一行，两个句子。我们不妨试着揣摩他/她写这段时的心理。他/她意识到自己遗漏了一个信息点吗？很可能。他/她选择了“垂死挣扎”的方法吗（详见满分（2）我猜我猜我猜猜猜部分）？显而易见，没有。这个三分不只是听漏一个信息点的分数，它在某种程度上更是一个在关键时刻选择放弃的考生的分数。 ? ? 我们再一起读读4分作文。请重点关注第三段。 ? Score 4 Response ?The lecture that followed the paragraph on ~he team work in organizations, gave some negative views of the team work itself.Firstly, though it was said in the paragraph that the whole team idea would probably be faster than the individual work, it was said in the lecture just the opposite: it could actually be a lot slower. That is bec