CET4真题作文-(手机的过度使用)--学生作文.docxVIP

PAGE \* MERGEFORMAT 3 2013年12月大学英语四级考试真题(二) Part 1 writing (30 minutes) For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay based on the picture below. You should start your essay with a brief account of the increasing use of the mobile phone in people’s life and explain the Consequence of overusing it. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words. People are crossing the street looking at their cell phones and using walking sticks in order to see. 从批改网中选取的学生高分作文，希望同学们比较，鉴别，学习。 Excessively Utilizing Cell Phones As is revealed in the graph, it is a plain truth that people are crossing the street looking at their cell phones and utilizing walking sticks in order to see. Consequently, there is no doubt that the phenomenon arouses public concern regarding this issue. To some extent, it is an undeniable fact that the cell phones is indispensable to our lives and works. For instance, it is no exaggeration to say the cell phones undoubtedly shorten the distance of communication among people. On the contrary, the issue that people place more emphasises on the cell phones also exerts negative impacts on their lives. On the one hand, it is universally acknowledged that excessively utilizing cell phones is detrimental to the eyesight. On the other hand, excessively utilizing the cell phones imposes restrictions on daily life, which will make us pour more attentions to it instead of working. In my humble opinion, it is absolutely essential to take measures to alleviate this issue. Undoubtedly, what the most crucial thing we should bear in mind is that advantages far outweigh disadvantages. To summarize, laying more emphasises on the merits of the cell phones which will facilitate your life. (196 words) 计算机 田文雨 90分(最高分) 批改网评语：作者学术词汇使用比较准确，词汇表达较丰富，但仍需增加词汇积累；作者句法基础不错，可适当增加复杂句的使用；行文稍欠流畅，应适当增加连接词的使用；请提高文章内敛性，段落和句子要围绕主题展开 The increasing use of the mobile phone in people’s life From the picture we can see that People are crossing the street looki