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考研1号读者在线作文点评与修改 考研英语【考研1号】系列图书为您提供诚挚的服务！更多考研资料获取请登录考研1号网站 写作原文 《写作160篇》考研英语话题写作重点预测44篇“论成功”?读者练习。 As it vividly shown in the picture above A man running in the right way leading by a compass. And the word written in the picture told us that a small right step is a big step to success. The cartoonist wants to tell us a successful career needs a correct leading. There are thousands of examples had told us if we want to be successful we should need a correct driction. The famous chinese sports super star Liu Xiang now is one of the best 110 meters hurdles sportman. But actully at the beginning of his sport career. His major was not the 110 meters hurdles. His major was high jump at that time.Unfortunely he has no gift on it .But luckily the 110 meters hurdles coach Mr. Sun Haiping notice him and found him was a talent in 110 meters hurdles.So Mr.Sun Haiping persuaded Liu Xiang to change his major into 110 meter hurdles. Finally Liu Xiang have a successful career which leading his coach Mr. Sun Haiping. Liu Xiang s experience remind us .Sometimes we need listen to other peoples advices.Because only those people around us can give us an objective judgement about ourselves and they are also our best compass. 原作点评 第一段点评 ①As it vividly shown in the picture above A man running in the right way leading by a compass. ②And the word written in the picture told us that a small right step is a big step to success. ③The cartoonist wants to tell us a successful career needs a correct leading. 首段是对漫画描述内容进行揭示：正确的一小步，是成功的一大步。 ⑴ 第一句中，注意标点符号以及字母大小写问题。在一句话内，主句和其状语之间，一般是逗号隔开，主句开头字母不需要大写。 ⑵ 第三句种，请注意tell 的用法。tell sb sth 或者tell sb that+句子。 ⑶ 建议写作者在一段话中，不要随意变换时态，要根据具体需要调整时态。 第二段点评 ①There are thousands of examples had told us if we want to be successful we should need a correct driction. ②The famous chinese sports super star Liu Xiang now is one of the best 110 meters hurdles sportman.③But actully at the beginning of his sport career. ④His major was not the 110 meters hurdles. ⑤Hi