写作技法点拨系列 2.3.ppt

三、恰当添加细节, 魅力动人 【技巧点拨】 　　根据高考英语作文的评分标准, 作文被分成了五个档次。其中分数较高的档次对于考生作文的要求都涉及了覆盖所有内容要点、使用较多语法结构和词汇、有效使用语句间的连接成分。其实, 还有一个重要的方面并没有被指出, 那就是在作文中要注意细节的体现。恰当添加细节的方法具体如下: 1. 列举具体的实例进行补充说明 (1)青少年应尽我们所能保护环境、拯救地球。 We teenagers should do what we can to protect the environment and save the earth. →We teenagers should do what we can to protect the environment and save the earth. For example, we can use recyclable bags instead of plastic bags, refuse to use single-use products, plant more trees and save water and energy. (2)我要花一些时间和父母在一起。 I’ll spend some time staying with my parents. →I’ll spend some time staying with my parents, chatting with them and doing some housework. (3)我想找一个像我一样喜欢旅行的笔友。 I like to seek a pen pal who is interested in traveling just like me. →I like to seek a pen pal who is interested in traveling just like me. If possible, we can travel together or share traveling. 2. 增添与所写信息相关的神态、动作、心理描写以及背景渲染等内容 (1)我有时去村西的小河游泳。 I went swimming in the river of the west of the village now and then. →I went swimming in the river of the west of the village now and then. The water in the river is very clear. (背景渲染) →Weather permitting, I went swimming in the river of the west of the village now and then. (相关背景) (2)我看到了一些不良行为。 I found some bad behavior. →I found some bad behavior. Some people scribbled on the wall; some played soccer on the lawn and some people threw rubbish everywhere. (相关行为描述) 3. 增加相关信息的时间、地点等内容 (1)我要和父母一起去超市购物。 I’m going to do some shopping with my parents in the supermarket. →I’m going to do some shopping with my parents in the supermarket and won’t be back until about 5: 00 in the afternoon. (增加时间) (2)我已经带来了你让我归还的这两本书。 I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return. →I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library. (增加地点) 4. 适当增加与所给信息相关的原因、结果、条件、让步、手段、目的、地点等内容 (1)假设你是李华, 你的英国笔友Henry最近来信询问你高考后的暑假安排。请根据下面要点写一封回信, 说明你的计划, 并简述理由。要点: 1. 休息; 2. 读书; 3. 参加社会活动 ①I need a good rest. I’ll do some reading. →I need a good r