雅思英文写作技巧范例1.ppt

Essay writing tasks Brain storming and sample for reference Comments on essay 1 1. the author does not give his position at the very beginning, but only presents the general situation that people are closely connected with the Internet; 2. he gives almost equal space to both positions: advantages and disadvantages; 3. in the last paragraph, he gives his position, but it is weak and too late. Comments on essay 1 4. advice: --almost all the topics for composition in language tests are controversial; the testee is expected to take a clear position, which should be presented as early as possible; --you may acknowledge the good reasons of the opposite position, but it needs to be very brief, better as a concession; --most of the space should be given to the reasoning of your position. Comments on essay 2 1. the author expresses his position very clearly in the first paragraph, but it seems too long; 2. the second paragraph is focused on the support of his position, but can be further strengthened; 3. the third paragraph gives solutions, further supporting his position; Comments on essay 2 4. advice: move the sentence “In many place…” (in paragraph 1) to the beginning of the second paragraph; or strengthen it a bit. Comments on essay 3 1. the position is clearly and directly presented; 2. the author compares the two systems in three ways one by one, with emphasis on his position; 3. the ending seems a bit abrupt. Comments on essay 4 1. the author compares the two systems in several ways to show that the computerized system may not be better, or even more unreliable. 2. on the whole his position and reasoning are clear. 3. but the last reason doesn’t seem strong enough: if processed more times, will it be reliable? 4. again, the ending is a bit abrupt. Essay writing Hints: The topic in such tests is always controversial, which means both positions have their own good reasons. The important thing is that you have a clear decision/position and you can support it suffici