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高考英语书面表达书信和通知辅导 【题例一】 书面表达：(NMET1999)假设你是李华，在一所中学读书。最近收到美国朋友Smith 先生的来信。他三年前参观过你校，听说现在变化很大，希望了解有关情况。参照下图（图片无法显示，见《高考纠错本 英语》一书，下同），给他写一封回信，介绍你校的变化。注意：1．回信须包括图画的主要内容，可以适当增减细节，使内容连贯。2．词数100左右。 Dear Mr Smith,I’m glad to receive your letter.①Yes,you’re right,in the past three years great changes happened in my school.There ②is only one school building in my school three years ago,but now,there is another new building ③at the east of our school and a library ④at the weast ⑤where used to be my playground.The new playground is built ⑥ out of my school age.⑦So my school becomes larger than before.Also around my school there are lots of trees which are planted by ourselves.⑧Now,my school becomes large and beautiful.I hope some day you can come to my school.⑨We’ll welcome you!Best wishes,Yours,Li Hua 【误点及纠错】1．短语句子不符习惯【纠错】本文要点基本齐全,但在表达中有些层次不清,且有多处语法和用法不当的错误.① 第二句话Yes, you’re right, in the past three years great changes happened in my school.中,有用词搭配错误，change 不能与happen一起使用，happen应改为take place,而且此处时态应该用完成时和时间状语in the past three years呼应。改后的句子为：Yes, you’re right, in the past three years great changes have taken place in my school.② 第二段第一句中is 应改为was.③ at the east of our school 应改为 in the east of our school.④ at the weast应改为 in the west, weast 是拼写错误。⑥ age是明显的拼写错误，应该是gate,这种错误应尽量避免；out of my school gate 指的是大门外，不妥。把out of 改成in front of 或outside较好。⑧ Now, my school becomes large and beautiful这句话可改为：Now, my school become more and more beautiful.理由同⑦。⑨We’ll welcome you ! 应改为:You are welcome!又如“题例二” ③ get to 是固定词组。⑤write down是固定词组，意为“记下”。⑥“在吃午饭时”，应用介词短语。⑧“to one’s joy”是固定词组，意为“令某人高兴的是。” ⑨another意为“又一”。又如“题例三” ①raise 相当于lift,指把某物位置升高；improve相当于become better,意为“改进；提高”。⑤按英语习惯，表达“欢迎某人做某事”时，经常把welcome用作形容词。又如“题例四”⑦can’t常用来表示“能力；可能性”，此处最好用shouldn’t。2．上下文缺乏逻辑【纠错】⑤ where used to be my playground 中存在逻辑错误，应改为：where our old playground used to be .3．结论不当【纠错】⑦ So my school becomes larger than before 这个结论不太恰当，学校不会因为操场的迁出而变大，况且在原操场处又建了图书馆，这句话应去掉。 参考范文：Dear Mr Smith,I was so pleased