读后续写五大黄金提分技巧.docxVIP

读后续写提分技巧：深度剖析考查要点，聚焦写作五大技巧 技巧一：动作描写：心中有“画” ，笔下有“话”(画面感) 1.通过分解动作使之更具有画面感 ①He?thanked?the man,?took over?the reins and?led?the pony in my direction.? ②Seeing this, Mr. Rowe?came up to?him,?crouched down?and?asked?in a tone of tender solicitude, “What’s up?” ③With a pang of nervousness seizing his heart tightly, he?stood?in front of the door,?wondering?about the old man’s reaction to being disturbed a second time. Finally, he?summoned up?all his courage and?knocked?at the door.? 情景1：碰到难题，苦思冥想。 What a complicated and difficult math problem! One second, Little John rested his chin in his hand and fiddled with the pencil. The next, he fidgeted in his seat and scratched his head over and over again, not having the faintest idea how to work it out. 情景2：成功爬上山顶。 The magnificent landscape unfolding in front of me, a sense of refreshment spread through me. Involuntarily, I stretched out my arms, tilted my head and exclaimed in delight at the top of my voice, feeling the crisp breeze on my face. 鉴赏案例1：请根据所给句子内容，结合原文，续写后面的句子。 句子①：Suddenly, a boy ran around the corner and crashed into me before I could jumped out of the way. [习作展示和赏析] 学生句子1: As result, we?fell down?and the gift box?dropped to the ground. 学生句子2: We?fell hard to the ground, and my gift box?flew from my hands?and landed on the street with a thump. 【点评】句子1只停留在发生了什么，属于叙述。而句子2我们重重的摔在地上，礼物随之飞出去砰的一声落在地上，则是通过fell, flew from, landed on这三个动作来描写杯子掉落的场景。这个句子不仅讲述了事件发生的经过，还给句子加上了声音“with thump”!要使一个平淡 ?的叙述句子转换成一个生动形象的描写句子可以通过分解动作或给句子加上声音，来使描写更具有画面感。 ??添加符合情境的细节描写使之更具有画面感。 在人物动作描写之外添加其心理、神态等，有时也可以辅以适当的环境描写。 给动作“涂脂抹粉” ①With his head drooping, John?reluctantly?turned around, and slowly inched his way to his room.? ②In a sobbing voice, he admitted and regretted having cheated in the test.? ③Without a momentary hesitation, I elbowed my way through the crowd in the direction of Lego section and all the way kept calling my brother’s name,?a note of uneasiness in my voice.? 情景3：发现一只受伤的小鸟。 On the grass ahead lay a swallow with an outstre