读后续写专项教学设计：《动物救援与个人成长——救赎一只红隼，成全一份成长》.docxVIP

读后续写专项教学设计：《动物救援与个人成长——救赎一只红隼，成全一份成长》

一、试题原文

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Theafternoonsunwassettingbelowthepinetrees(环境描写)whena13yearoldencounteredthetremblingcreature.Beneathafallenbranchlayayoungkestrel(红隼),(全部倒装句)itsbrownfeatherscoveredwithmud(独立主格刻画形象),onewingbentatanunnaturalangle(描写状态).Theirheartached.Theyremembereda祖辈’swordsfromlastsummer:“Wildthingsneedcouragemorethanpity,butsometimestheyneedboth.”Kneeling(现在分词做伴随动作),theyextendedagentlehand.Thebird’sambereyesmettheirs,showingfearandresistance(现在分词短语做伴随动作).

Carefullywrappingthekestrelintheirsweatshirt(现在分词短语做伴随动作),theteenagerhurriedhome.Afamilymember,aclinicdoctor,examinedthebirdwithpracticedhands.“Itswingisbroken,”theysaid,“butwithcare,itmightflyagain.”Theteenager’sresolvehardened.Forweeks,theytransformedthegarageintoashelter.Theylinedacardboardboxwithhay,hungitfromtheceiling,andstudiedbirdcaringhandbookslateintothenight(动作串描写，可作为救援类续写语料).Thekestrel,nownamedRosy(过去分词短语做后置定语),resistedatfirst,hittingattheboardonitswing(现在分词短语做伴随动作).Yeteachtimetheteenagersangthe祖辈’sfavoritetune—YouAreMySunshine—thebirdstilled,holdingitshead(现在分词短语做伴随动作)asifdecodingthemelody(状从压缩).

Progresswaspainfullyslow.Rosy’swingtrembledduringdailyexercises,andtheteenager’shandsborescratchesfromfeedingitrawmeat.“Patience,”thefamilymemberreminded,handingthemcleanwipes(现在分词短语做伴随动作).Bythethirdweek(注意时间变化),Rosybeganjumpingbetweenitsrestingplaces,itsfeathersregainingacopperycolor(独立主格刻画变化).Onetwilight,astheteenagersatcrossleggedbesidethecage,thekestrelflappedonce,twice—liftingafullinchbeforelandingclumsily(现在分词短语做伴随动作).“Youdidit!”theycried,heartpounding(独立主格).

Thencamethestormynight(全部倒装句).Lightningknockedoutthepower,turningthegarageintodarkness(现在分词短语做结果状语).Theteen