2013届高考英语二轮复习书面表达复习专题08 健康饮食话题指导.docVIP

2013届高考英语二轮复习书面表达复习专题08 健康饮食话题指导 实例指导1――学生如何饮食 【写作任务】 写好此种类型的作文要掌握一定的方法，注意行文的结构。 【学生习作】 Nowadays, ①there are more and more students get fatter and fatter, and ②two fifth of them belong to the group of overweight students. In terms of beauty and health they all hope to lose weight. Anyway, they should have a balanced diet. As we all know, its very important for us to form healthy eating ③habbits. However, some of us usually go to school without breakfast; some are fond of soft drinks and sweet food rather than nutritious food; others are particular about food and still some eat or drink too much at a time. All those lifestyles do great harm to our health. Therefore, we should have a balanced diet including vegetables and fruits, which is good to our health. Whats more, wed better have meals regularly. As far as Im concerned, we should develop a good eating habit to keep healthy. Only in this way can we keep fit and have enough energy to devote ourselves to study. ed，we should develop to study. 【教师点评】 本文紧扣主题, 结构分明，分段描述了不良的饮食习惯及其坏处，最后还表达了自己的观点。语言地道得体，词语和句型使用较规范，例如—些高级词；In terms of , rather than , be particular about , do harm to , as far as I Im concerned 等的应用，而且还注意到了过渡词汇的运用：however，and still , therefore，what’ s more等；在第二段的描述中避免了一味地运用first，second，third等，而是采用了some …some…others以及and still来清晰条理地写出了各种不良的饮食习惯。另外还使用了灵活句式：Therefore，we should have a balanced diet including vegetables and fruits，which is good for our health．这是一个句意充实，结构复杂的句子，其中包含一个现在分词短语作定语和一个非限制性定语从句，Only in this way can we keep fit and have enough energy to devote ourselves to study. ed，we should develop to study. 这是一个only +状语放在句首，句子要部分倒装的语法点。 文章的不足之处在于：开头段落就出现了两处明显的语法错误①①there are more and more students get fatter and fatter, and ②two fifth of them belong to the group of overweight students.致使文章的风采锐减 ，同时这也是写作的一大忌讳，①处可改为：there are more and more students getting tatter and fatter．②处可改为two fifths of them belong to him the group of over weight students. 另外文中的③单词拼写错误habit中只有一个b。拼写错误在作文中也是应当避免的， 这是一篇文字提