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《写作160篇》考研英语话题写作经典必背20篇之“食品安全”读者练习 写作原文 What a thought-provoking picture! As more and more toxic chemicals are flowing to our eating food, Food Safety Law, who acting as a protecter keep our daily eating things such as milk powder,vegetables?from?being contaminated.?How to maintain the safety?of food is a big task for everyone. Why there are?more and more food safety problems? I?would like to?analyse it?in two?aspects. Firstly, the fast speed of our life space has made us no time to cook dinner by ourselves for a period of time ,so the posibility of?having chemicals?from fast food such like Sudan Red in KFC is high. Secondly, as you know that bussinessmens conscience is getting worse,as a result,?disregarding poeples?healthy has become so common for them. What should we do??On one hand, as the social people in this day and age, we should develop?the knowledge of?food safety, for instance, obtaining the capability of recognising food that goes bad. One the other hand,the government should exert its efforts to co-ordinate and control food safety, thus making common people have healthy bodies and sliling faces. 原作点评 第一段点评 ①What a thought-provoking picture! ②As more and more toxic chemicals are flowing to our eating food, Food Safety Law, who acting as a protecter keep our daily eating things such as milk powder,vegetables?from?being contaminated.?③How to maintain the safety?of food is a big task for everyone. 首段描述漫画内容，并揭示漫画内容。再揭示漫画内容时，不够明显。 ⑴第二句，请注意主谓一致问题，keep→keeps。 ⑵ 第三句，建议添加一点内容，?From the picture, we know that how to maintain the safety?of food has become a big problem for everyone.（这样会使得作者的写作意图更加明显）。 第二段点评 ①Why there are?more and more food safety problems? ②I?would like to?analyse it?in two?aspects. ③Firstly, the fast speed of our life space has made us no time to cook dinner by ourselves for a period of time ,so the posibility of?having chemicals?from fast food such like Sudan Red in KFC is high. ④Secondly, as you know that bussinessmens conscience is getting wors