托福写作实例解析之计算机的利弊.doc

托福写作实例解析之计算机的利弊 小马过河为大家准备了“托福写作实例解析之计算机的利弊”， 供各位备考托福的考生们参考使用，来提高自己的托福成绩！免费咨询电话：400-0123-267 　　实例 　　Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 　　存在问题 　　(1) 相对较多的语法错误，这会直接影响到写作的最终得分。 　　(2)文章第二段的主体部分应该在深入扩展一下，多寻找一些sub-point来支持你的topic,而且文章的字数也刚过标准线250字，这需要引起关注。 　　It is no denying that the greatest invention in the latest 50 years is personal computer, and now, more than half families have at least one computer and the access to the internet.Paired withinternet, the computer has not only changed the way we know the world, but also changed the way we live. Though the new tool might make some older people feel difficult to learn, which would cause some stress and complexity to them. However, I believe that computers bring many advantages do have made our lives much easier and more convenient. 　　Number one, computers make us easy to learn. Using computers with internet, people will find the information they need very quickly, may be just a few seconds. By this way, we are able to get enough materials related to the subjects, thus we can learn something usefulvery efficient and effectively.Number two, computers change the way we shop. Nowadays, people are able to purchase things online. Only we do is clicking on web site for several times, then the money is paid, the things are delivered home by home.Number three, thanks to the computers; internet becomes a new kind of media. Internet makes people easy to communicate by emails, instant messages, and blogs. From this aspect, Internet equalizes the rich and poor, because it makes every person whether he/shepossessthe powerhave access to voice their opinion. 　　In conclusion, it is computer and internet that our lives have been greatly changed by. After all, the computer technology has been involved almost in every industry, so it is a trend t