福州市2010—2011学年末高三质量检查书面表达.pptVIP

书面表达指导;书面表达;注意 : 1. 短文必须包括所有要点 , 可以适当发挥，行文连贯 ; 2. 短文开头已为你写好 , 不计入总词数 ; 3. 词数 120 左右。 参考词汇 :psychological 心理 ( 上 ) 的 consultant 提供咨询的专家 （另注：少于100词，扣2分。）;【参考范文】; The causes of the mental problems above may include too much school work, high expectations from the teachers and the parents and lack of physical exercise and communication. 说明焦虑的起因，用三个并列的名词短语，表达简练。 简单的一个above起到了承上的作用。 句中用了may一词，可以避免给人主观臆断的感觉。 同时范文对pressure具体化的拓展，使内容相对饱满。 ;What should we do to solve these problems? In my opinion, firstly we should take more exercise and learn to relax ourselves. Secondly, we are supposed to talk to our friends about our problems and seek advice from psychological consultants. Meanwhile, schools should set up special offices to help students solve their mental problems. Parents should also care more about the mental health of their children. Only by doing so can we solve these problems. ( 148 words ) 如何解决焦虑的问题应是阐述的重点。范文根据所给的提示，针对第二段的causes，从students，schools，parents三方面提出了问题的解决之道。 句首的设问句，给人留下思考的空间，也使短文更富有活力。 firstly，secondly等表示顺序、时间（meanwhile）、递进（also）的连接词的使用使结构连贯、层次分明、脉络清晰。 最后用倒装句结束短文，比较“给力”。 ;问题与错误;2. 没有适当、合情合理地发挥展开 What causes the problems? Pressure is the root. As a grade-three student, the pressure comes from many parts of your life, such as yourself, your parents, and the teachers (What pressure?) Parents should take care about (?of) the food the graduating students eat. ;3. 词法、句法、语法等错误不胜枚举，仅列举些许： 1) 用词不当 First, pressure from their parents is the most important reason (?cause). 2) 搭配/用法错误 Why do they worry so many things? worry ? worry about / over worry (that) -clause be worried about / by /(that) -clause Many students lack of communication.? lack communication. (A) lack of communication with others is blamed for their anxiety. There are too many things being worried. ? There are too many things to worry about. ;3)词类不分 And that beyond our reach. ? And that is b