unit 2 fax and email重点.ppt

* * Technique 3 Tighten Your Writing 删掉没有意义的词汇，删掉句中已表达过的词汇，用一个单词替代复杂的短语。例如： Wordy: Keep this information on file for future reference. Tighter: Keep this information for reference. or: File this information. Wordy: Ideally, it would be best to put the billing ticket just below the CRT screen and above the keyboard. Tighter: If possible, put the billing ticket between the CRT screen and the keyboard. * * Technique 3 Tighten Your Writing 由of, which 和that 开始的短语常常可以缩短： Wordy: the question of most importance Tighter: the most important question Wordy: the estimate which is enclosed Tighter: the enclosed estimate * * Technique 3 Tighten Your Writing 由There are 或It is 引导的句子常常可以更紧凑： Wordy: There are three reasons for the success of the project. Tighter: Three reasons explain the project’s success. Wordy: It is the case that college graduates advance more quickly in the company. Tighter: College graduates advance more quickly in the company. * * Technique 3 Tighten Your Writing 将句子合并，删去不必要的词汇。让读者的关注力集中在重点信息上，加强句子间逻辑和连贯，让表达更准确。例如： Wordy: I conducted this survey by telephone on Sunday, April 21. I questioned two groups of upperclassmen—male and female—who, according to the Student Directory, were still living in the dorms. The purpose of this survey was to find out why some upperclassmen continue to live in the dorms even though they are no longer required by the University to do so. I also wanted to find out if there were any differences between male and female upperclassmen in their reasons for choosing to remain in the dorms. * * Technique 3 Tighten Your Writing Tighter: On Sunday, April 21, I phoned upperclassmen and upperclass women living in the dorms to find out (1) why they continue to live in the dorms even though they are no longer required to do so, and (2) whether men and women have the same reasons for staying in the dorms. * * Technique 4 Use Parallelism 遵循“并列”的语言表达，即并列部分语法结构要类似。例如： Not parallel: This book is out of stock and not being printed. Parallel: T