The Sunshine in My Life.ppt

The Sunshine in My Life No. 52 Middle School Zhou Huijuan 每个人的成长过程中，都有很多影响自己的人。和父母、老师、朋友分享自己的快乐烦恼，互相支持鼓励，让你的生活充满阳光。请以“The Sunshine in My Life”为题写一篇80词左右的短文，叙述一件你和他（们）一起经历过的事，及这件事给你的感悟。 Analysis of writing Group 1 审 题 体裁： 时态： 列提纲 Beginning ： Body： Ending: 每个人的成长过程中，都有很多影响自己的人。和父母、老师、朋友分享自己的快乐烦恼，互相支持鼓励，让你的生活充满阳光。请以“The Sunshine in My Life”为题写一篇80词左右的短文，叙述一件你和他（们）一起经历过的事，及这件事给你的感悟。 审 题 体裁：情感表达类记叙文 时态： 过去时，一般现在时 列提纲 Beginning ： 交代人物，点题 Body： 叙述一件发生过的事（你的烦恼，父母、老师或朋友给你的鼓励） Ending: 首尾呼应，感悟 Analysis of writing Group 1 The Sunshine in My Life My body part : tell a story Problems I have : have difficulty in learning English under much pressure fail in an exam argue with sb get along in a new place … be ill---help me with lessons/ take good care of me 时态： 过去时，一般现在时 body： 叙述一件发生过的事（你的烦恼，父母、老师或朋友给你的鼓励） Help me get over it Group 2 The Sunshine in My Life My body part 1. Besides, mother always encourages me to study hard. I remember once I failed an exam. She didn’t complain to me. Instead, in order to cheer me up she talked with me for a long time and told me to face my difficulty. At last I got confident again and became a top student in my class later. 2. Once I was expected to do better in the exam, but I failed. Therefore, I was too upset to say a word when I got home. 3. It was the smile which was like sunlight that lighted up my whole world. At that time, I felt that I was full of power to face the failure bravely. Group 3 我的习作 The Sunshine in My Life My body part 4. I feel lucky to be her student, for she always offers us help when we’re in trouble. So I still remember that day when she encouraged me. 5. My teachers had a long talk with me. They told me that I should study harder rather than stop. 6. After that, I realized how deeply my mother loves me. 7. Little by little, I got over the difficulty and found my confidence again. Group