4-sentence conciseness.ppt

Effective Sentence: Conciseness GUIDELINES How to achieve sentence conciseness Conciseness means being brief, without using unnecessary words. The opposite of conciseness is redundancy (using more words than necessary). Avoid redundancy and tighten wordy sentences to achieve conciseness. Effective Sentence: Conciseness GUIDELINES How to avoid redundancy Cut out unnecessary words Cut out unnecessary repetition Cut out empty phrases use appropriate language Effective Sentence: Conciseness Use a pronoun instead of repeating a noun; Use a word instead of a phrase with the same meaning, and use a phrase instead of a clause with the same meaning; Do not repeat words or phrases, if possible, in a sentence or in one that follows; Do not use different words or phrases with similar meanings in the same sentence; Do not repeat the same idea in different sentences except for emphasis. The following sentence is wordy and can be simplified: In the month of May people of different professions from all circles in this city will hold meetings to elect representatives, and these representatives will go to Beijing, the capital, in October to attend a national congress of model workers from the whole country. In the month of May can be shorted to in May without any loss of meaning; of different professions and from all circles mean the same thing, so only one of them is needed; hold meetings can be omitted because it is not important; the important thing is that they will elect representatives; who can be used in place of these representatives; the capital can be omitted; national and from the whole country are synonymous, so the phrase can be deleted: In May people of different professions in the city will elect representatives, who will attend a national congress of model workers in Beijing in October. There are trees on all sides of the house, and the trees hide the house. People can hardly see the ho