山寨文化5《写作160篇》修改作文活动之“山寨文化”读者练习.docVIP

考研英语【考研1号】系列图书为您提供诚挚的服务！更多考研资料获取请登录考研1号网站 《写作160篇》修改作文活动之“山寨文化”读者练习 写作原文 What a thought-provoking picture it is! In the middle of the drawing crouches a person with a cunning smile, who is changing the fake vases into so-called“shanzhai” products which are popular among people nowadays. Apparently, the primary purpose of the cartoon above is that due attention should be paid to the action of forgery. In the modern society, the phenomenon that “shanzhai” culture can be found every place has caused wide public concern. When asked whether copied commodities should be purchased, some people hold positive attitudes and express “yes” because they think these goods have few differences with their counterparts in term of functions or appearances. There are still quite a few citizens, however, who choose to boycott “shanzhai” products on the ground that they are fake brands which may do harm to the benefits of consumers and those who have copyrights. Fortunately, the latter opinion is now being upheld by sensible people in growing numbers, who have proved its reasonability by buying commodities produced from normal factories. There is no doubt that anyone who sees only short-term profits but fails to attach importance to honesty and conscience will pay a high price. It’s high time that we took some steps to amend this abnormal situation. Above all, everyone of us shouldn’t buy those copied goods on our own initiative. By doing so, there may be no manufacturer producing “shanzhai”products. Remember, no transaction, no production! Moreover, governments should be encouraged to make some regulations and legislations concerned to punish those cheaters. Only in these ways can we enjoy the convenience and sufficient after-sell services of normal commodities. 修改点评 文章很好地完成了试题所规定的内容，其优点在于： ①内容充实，思路清晰。文章的主体部分第二段列出了不同人的不同观点，同时揭露出山寨文化的利弊，最后一段给出了自己的见解，同时提出了建议和措施。不仅有内容，而且逻辑非常清楚。 ②衔接非常好。作者跳出了使用At first, secondly, in addition, moreover, last but not the least等模版作文常见的为了连接而连接的生硬的衔接词，而使用了很好的内部