巧用非谓语动词提高基础写作分数.doc

巧用非谓语动词提高基础写作分数 巧用非谓语动词提高基础写作分数 　　广东省高考英语基础写作的评分标准主要强调内容要点，注重语言准确度和篇章连贯性，鼓励考生尝试语言表达的多样化和复杂化。因此，要写成一篇较有水准的作文，除了要点齐全和语言准确以外，还必须在语法结构以及表达的多样性和灵活性上有所表现。恰当的运用非谓语来修饰和衔接句子不失为达到该评分标准的一种有效途径，既避免了过多的简单句或复合句带来的枯燥乏味，又使文章连贯紧凑，句式活泼，增强篇章可读性。 　　一、运用非谓语动词作定语提升句子 　　[例1]信息点壹基金创建时间：2007年4月19日；倡导理念：每人每月捐出一元，组成一个互相关爱的大家庭。 　　信息表述：One Foundation was established on April 19th， 2007 and it promotes the idea that a monthly donation of one yuan from each individual helps form a big family where everyone cares about each other. 　　[点拨] 该句要点齐全，语法和句子结构都没有错误，但两个简单句的并列使句子关系松散，没有亮点，不易得高分。如果用非谓语动词改写，会使整个句子结构紧凑，表现力更强。 　　改写：One Foundation，established on April 19th， 2007， promotes the idea that a monthly donation of one yuan from each individual helps form a big family where everyone cares about each other. 　　[例2] 信息点节目：我是歌手；首播：湖南卫视；效果：为热情的观众和有才华的参赛者带来别样的感觉。 　　信息表述：Im a Singer， which premiered on Hunan Satellite TV， offers something different to both viewers who are excited and contestants that are talented. 　　[点拨] 该句无论从语法还是句子结构来看，都没有错误，但过多使用从句，看似高级却稍显累赘。如果用非谓语动词改写，会使语言精炼，给读者感觉格外的舒服。 　　改写：Im a Singer， premiering on Hunan Satellite TV， offers something different to both excited viewers and talented contestants. 　　二、运用非谓语动词作状语提升句子 　　[例3] 信息点（春节）庆祝活动：除夕夜，全家团圆，吃团圆饭，看春晚。 　　信息表述：On the Eve of the new year， the whole family will get together， have a big family feast as well as enjoy the Spring Festival Gala. 　　[点拨] 该句无语法错误，但三个动词的并列过于平淡，缺少层次，如果用非谓语动词改写，会使整个句子主次分明，层次感增强。 　　改写：On the Eve of the new year， the whole family will get together， having a big family feast as well as enjoying the Spring Festival Gala. 　　[例4] 信息点（壹基金李连杰的个人看法）担忧：最近一些相关负面新闻的影响；展望：中国慈善事业将吸引更多人参与。 　　信息表述：Though he is worried about the effects of some recent negative news， Li expects that the charity work in China will attract more people to participate in it in the future. 　　[点拨] 该句总体过于平淡，缺少亮点，如果用非谓语动词改写，会使整个句子鲜活起来，给人以新鲜感。 　　改写：Though worried about the effects of some recent negative news， Li expects that the charity work in China will attract