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一、避免误置修饰语： 误置修饰语是一个用作修饰语的词或词组，因为没有靠近它所修饰的词，结果使意义模糊不清或改变了句子的意思。 *修改下面的句子，注意误置修饰语的错误。 At the age of six my father began to teach me English. I almost got good marks in every subject. In despair we could imagine what an ordinary man would do. The girl is my friend whom you met at the party yesterday. The money was put in the box which father gave me. You will enjoy looking at the pictures that you took years later. There was a spot on her new dress that could not be removed. She put the sandwiches back in the bag that she had not eaten. With love and care I realized my parents raised me the best way they could. I saw that the murderer had been caught in the evening paper. 二、逻辑主语一致问题： 注意分词、动名词、不定式及某些形容词短语的逻辑主语应与句子的主语一致。 *修改以下句子： Coming out of the classroom, my heart was beating very fast. Looking down the valley, smoke came up. To be well-informed, reading newspapers is a good habit. Lying there on the beach in the sun, schoolwork didn’t seem important. Sound asleep in the living room, I came across my grandfather. When ten years old, my mother gave me a ring. Apologetically the food was place before us. Because of going to too many parties, my term paper was late. Too excited to eat, the letter was read over and over. Ready to start, the bus was in front of the building waiting for us. Dressed in blue, mother thought the little girl looked prettier. 三、避免人称代词的混淆： 整篇文章宜使用固定的代词，以第一人称叙述的文章不能转成第二人称。用第三人称叙述的文章就不能转用第一或第二人称。 *修改下面用错的代词： Before operating the machine, one should read directions carefully. Otherwise you may have an explosion. Very few people can get as much enjoyment out of modern art as they could. One need not be an artist to get some fun out of painting. Nor do you need to be very artistic. We had been on the planet for eighteen hours, and you get pretty tired of sitting that long. 四、避免冗长累赘： 写作时要用简洁明了的语言，避免不必要的词语。 *将下列句子用简洁的语言表述： Personally I think he is a good student. She helped the old man to sit down in the armchair. I seldom go to the Shanghai Library