虚拟语气在写作中的提分技巧 作文练习评讲.ppt

欣赏下列两个语段，并指出它们的技巧 1. Brief as the passage is, it still arouses my endless imagination to the past time. Were I in the past, I would like that I stayed in Britain in the 19th century, where and when the Revolution of Industry was flourishing. With the inspiring atmosphere of the creative times, I would try my utmost to do my favorite scientific experiment, since I have great interest in science. What’s more, the scientific lovers would be invited to join my little club to invent some brand-new inventions and create new designs of our daily life’s products, cooperating to put the theory we learned from books to our practical life. In this way I could get inspiration of wisdom and resourcefulness to bring convenience and improvements to our life. 2. Should I be given the opportunities to travel to the past, I would like to go back to Qing Dynasty of early 20th century when China was in a disaster. Were I back in the late Qing Dynasty, I would make every endeavor to rescue China from the foreign invaders and prevent it from being bullied without resistance. Firstly, I would teach my modern theory and knowledge to the governors, instructing them to fight against the enemies and construct powerful armies. Secondly, all the citizens would be called on to unite together and resist other countries’ invasion bravely. What’s more, joining some anti-invaders parties would also be my choice. 排比 倒装（赢在写作 P37-38） Simple as the story is , Here goes the saying that ___. Only when _____ can we ___. Only in this way, can we Only by doing -, can we____. Only after doing sth, can we On the west of the school lies a pond, where many fish are swimming. Under no circumstance should we - 类似的用法： Never/ By no means / on no account / in no way / at no time should I . Hardly/scarcely had I got into the room when it began to rain.( no sooner， than) 亮点写作的注意事项 1. 过多的亮点，显得堆砌 对策：亮点分布，尽量首句 2.亮点单一，例如全段排比或比喻 对策：最好总—排比---总的结构。照顾段落的完整性。 3.华而不实，不重视内容，徒有框架没有内容 对策：先想内容，再想修辞手法 4. 过多注重运用亮点，没