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Compiled by Scott Song, scotts327@126.com Welcome to Writing in the Academic World Instructor: Scott Song Chapter 3 Effective Sentences (1) Unity Coherence Sentence variety Exercises 1. Unity (P. 30) What is Unity? Every sentence should contain a central idea (一致性原则). Examples Building could be constructed high to save land, and also some constructions are repetition. This sentence has two different ideas, so it is a poor sentence and confusing. Unity Identify whether the following sentences are good ones or lacking of unity. E.g. 1 English is difficult to learn and to become proficient we must use it often. Answer: lack of unity (exclusiveness of main idea, 主题思想的唯一性) (and 连接 “to learn” 和“to become proficient”, 两者表达的意思不一致, 违背了主题思想的唯一性) Unity How do you revise it? English is difficult to learn and no one can learn it without effort. E.g. 2: Giving birth to a child, I found another job. Answer: lack of unity (relativity of main idea, 主题思想的相关性) “Giving birth to a child” 和 “I found another job”不相关,违背了主题思想的相关性. Unity How do you revise it? After giving birth to a child, I found another job. 加上了”after” 后,句子便有了时间的连贯和动作的顺承. Coherence Example: Whenever a neighbor dropped in, it was a joy. How do you revise it? Whenever a neighbor dropped in, I (we, our family) felt a joy. The drop in of a neighbor brought great joy to the family. Coherence Example: using transitional expressions such as conjunctions. The college campus is located in the center of the city, it is very easy for me to do my shopping. How do you revise it? Using coordinating conjunctions such as and, but , for, or, nor, so, yet to connect the two sentences. Coherence The college campus is located in the center of the city, so it is very easy for me to do my shopping. Coherence Example: My writing is good, my mathematics is not satisfactory. How do you revise the sentence with two independent clause? My writing is good, but my mathematics is not satisfactory. Coherence- Para