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1999试题作文评讲 Directions: Study the following graphs carefully and write an essay in at least 150 words. Your essay must be written neatly on ANASER SHEET II. Your essay should cover these three points: effect of the country’s growing human population on its wildlife. possible reason for the effect. your suggestion for wildlife protection. 参考范文： From these graphs, we can learn that with the growth of human population, the number of species has decreased rapidly in America, and some species have been（改：even） vanished from our planet. 第一段不是很切题。没有明确指出effect，也没有很好得利用图表中的信息。可以改写如下： Many evidences point to the fact that the human behavior has negative influence on other species.（引入话题） The given graphs can be a clear illustration to the effect of the growth of human population on the wildlife.（本段主题句。利用了effect保证切题。为了本段陈述方便，将effect of the country’s growing human population on its wildlife作了一点改动。）Though the two graphs cover different spans of time, one may still see a clear relationship between the growth of human population and the growth of the number of extinct species.（作为对主题句的发展支持，先引述图表中总的重要信息）As the graphs indicate, during the same period of time (from 1800 to 1900), the US population grew rapidly whereas the number of extinct species increased sharply, too. （利用图表中的信息做细节发展。此句也可以表达为：As can be seen from the graphs, both the US population and the number of extinct species increased sharply during the same period of time (from 1800 to 1900)）. It can not be denied that the growth of human population does have effect on other species.（呼应段首句，作为本段结尾句） I believe that there are several reasons for the phenomenon.（为了更好地承上启下，此句可以改写为：Several reasons may explain such human effect on wildlife）（为了保证切题，本段主题句要注意用上关键词reason） Firstly, with the rapid growth of population, more and more people have come to live where some wild species have been living. Then these species have to move to other places. Probably some of them can not adapt to the new environment and die. Secondly, although many p