2018年高考英语一轮复习 写作技法点拨系列6 升格作文档次, 打造写作亮点课件 外研版.pptVIP

写作技法点拨系列 六、升格作文档次, 打造写作亮点 【核心点拨】 　　四步提升作文档次 　　要在高考英语作文中得到高分, 考生必须让自己的文章有“亮点”, 做到妙笔生花, 体现出高超的语言驾驭能力和谋篇布局的能力。一篇高考英语作文若能做到“结构紧凑、要点齐全、内容连贯、语言丰富”再加上“亮点频现”, 则必能征服阅卷者, 获得高分。 　　下面我们就以一篇C档考场作文为例, 通过完成每一步后面的升级任务, 来具体体会如何将一篇普通作文升级为最优秀作文。 　　As we all know that Southwest China like Yunnan, Guizhou and Sichuan is suffering from terrible drought because of it is very dry. It lasted a few months. Many rivers and lakes dried up. Many crops died out. People need water very much. The government has done many things to help the people fight against it. People throughout our country also do a lot things to help them, for example, give money or water to them. 　　We should unite and help each other. For the other hand, we should save water, every drop of water, it is very valuable. We can solve the problem only in this way and enjoy a happy life. 　　第1步: 清除简单语言错误 　　升级任务: 请将文中的八处错误找出来, 并逐一改正。 　　(1)第一句中的that去掉, 并在know后面加逗号。 　　(2)第一句中because of短语去掉of。 　　(3)第二句中的lasted改为has lasted。　　 　　(4)第三句中的dried up改为have dried up。 　　(5)第四句中的died out改为have died out。 　　(6)第七句中的a lot改为a lot of。 　　(7)第九句中的For改为On。 　　(8)第九句中it is very valuable中的it改为which。 　　第2步: 让词语亮丽起来 　　升级任务: 请用更高级的词汇替换斜体的单词和 短语。 　　(1)The government has done many things to help the people fight against it. 　　The government ___________________________ ________to help the people fight against it. takes quick action and effective measures 　　(2)People throughout our country also do a lot of things to help them, for example, give money or water to them. 　　People throughout our country also do ________ ________to ______ money or water to offer help. whatever they can donate 　　第3步: 让句式丰富多变起来 　　升级任务: 请根据不同提示表述: 　　中国西南缺雨导致的干旱已持续了数月。 　　(1)because of, shortage, suffer from 　　__________________________________________ ___________________________________________ Because of the shortage of rain for a few months, Southwest China is suffering from severe drought. 　　(2)severe shortage, bring suffering to 　　__________________________________________