董希滚老师写作指导课.PPT

Guided Writing — A Narrative Story(夹叙夹议） 授课老师：董希滚 《普通高中英语课程标准（实验稿）》（教育部，2003）对语言技能目标（八、九级）中的写提出了明确的要求：（要求学生）能写出语意连贯且结构完整的短文，叙述事情或表达观点和态度；能比较详细和生动地用英语描述情景、态度或感情；能阐述自己的观点和评述他人的观点； Requirement A.第五档(很好)：(25-30分)1.完全完成了试题规定的任务。2.覆盖所有内容要点。3.应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。4.语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致;具备较强的语言运用能力。5.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑,行文流畅、语意连贯。6.完全达到了预期的写作目的。 B.第四档(好)：(19-24分)1.完全完成了试题规定的任务。2.虽漏掉1、2个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。3.应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。4.语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。5.应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑，行文流畅、语意连贯。6.达到了预期的写作目的。 Assessment 事情和观点必须要一致 Requirement 第二节书面表达(满分30分) 为了筹钱帮助山区老人，你们班组织了一次义买活动。 请你就这次活动写一篇英语短文，内容包括： 活动时间和地点：3月18日在学校大门口 活动过程 你对活动的感受 注意： 1．文中不能出现考生个人信息； 2．词数：120左右； 3．可适当增加细节以使行文连贯 参考词汇：义卖：charity sale 义卖场：fancy fair Writing in the 8th monthly test 描述清楚一件事情： when where what why who how 表达清楚一个观点（建议）： Your feelings … On March 18th at the school gate a charity sale To raise money for the poor elderly in mountainous areas our class … (vividly described) Beginning: Body: Ending: Topic(when/where/what/why/who) Story in detail(how) Point of view (your feelings) Structure On March 18th, a charity sale was organized by our class at the school gate, which aimed to raise money for the poor old people (Poor elderly) in mountainous areas. 1-2 sentences(开门见山） 4-5 sentences 2-3 sentences (e.g. Something you’ve learnt from this experience) (e.g. Difficulty or challenge, special effort and outcome) We had a charity sale for the old who live in the mountains at the school gate on March 18th. We prepared it a week before that. We persuade students to bring what they don’t need. They are so enthusiastic that things piled up like a mountain. Finally the day arrived. We tried hard to advertise our products. With all the efforts we made, they were sold out. Through it, I have learnt something important. Being refused can be embarrassed. but it is always in our life if you simply get away, you won’t grow up mentally. Besides, we should do something good to fee