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以下是考研1号编辑部老师在线修改的 HYPERLINK /fxbk/kyyy/ \t _blank 考研英语读者作文习作，该篇作文是读者根据《写作160篇》中的话题写作“因材施教”要求所写，文章中有我们编辑部老师所作的作文修改批注，希望同学们通过此篇文章的阅读，弥补自己平时写作中的不足，努力提高自己的写作水平!《写作160篇》 HYPERLINK /fxbk/kyyy/ \t _blank 考研英语写作话题之“因材施教”读者练习写作原文As is described in the picture, a duck mother (hoping前，trees后都加逗号)hoping her little duck knows how to climb trees invites the monkey teacher to teach her kid who opens his mouth and eyes astonishedly. Nowadays, parents all hold the same strong willing(加s) that their sons and daughters can do anything better than other(加s).On the one hand, I can understand the fathers and mother’s(mothers’) expectation,(逗号变句号)? because(Because) with (改为of)the economic development, social competition is increasingly fierce,(变句号)? those(改为Those) equipped with practical and profound knowledge will arrive at the top of the successful mountain. On the other hand, we have to acknowledge (加that)no two leaves are identical in the world. Some people may be good at studying, (加but)others(加may) do well in sports possibly. No person is perfect. Sometimes we force children to do what they dislike or have no potential on(删), (加and) the consequence is unlikely good.What should parents do? Before deciding(decide) what to teach children, parents had better observing(变为observe, had better do sth.) their babies’ interests and talent, and then guide them to develop thier(改为their) ability gradually,(去逗号)according to the observation.总体点评考研作文的整体思路框架你已经掌握，但文中还存在一些问题：1.少量语法错误，标点，单词拼写错误，希望好好扎实基础知识，这些问题可在写作完成后，回读的时候发现并解决。建议回读自己的作品。希望在以后写作中更加细心，避免不必要的失分，使文章更完美。2.文章整体结构明确，但内容与主题关系不大，文中未点明图画含义，没有讨论要因材施教的原因，问题解决方法及自己的建议。希望参考写作160篇，学习如何把握文章中心，积累高级词句，以提高自己的写作水平。3.写作是积累的过程，多背优秀作文，积累高分句式，单词，相信你的写作的水平会更上一层楼，在考研洪流中拔尖而出。加油吧，祝你考研成功!参考分数(满分20分)：10《写作160篇》 HYPERLINK /fxbk/kyyy/ \t _blank 考研英语写作话题之“豪华婚礼”读者练习写作原文As is vividly betrayed in the drawing above that(删), a new married(改为newlywed) couple is standing on the pile of money which holds(改为is held) by their parents with sweat streaming down their back.