大学英语写作之句子.pptVIP

大学英语写作之句子 句子的问题 如何使句子写作达到简洁? 下面的例子中许多罗嗦的句子不是出于对风格的选择，而是因为没有掌握基本的和常用的表达法而被迫换个说法造成的。最多的表现是不该用从句的时候用了从句。 用还是不用从句的标准就是要看用了从句能否使表达更简洁。如果本来要用两句，甚至三句话，用从句后变成了一个句子，那就说明用得好。如果一个意思完全可以用简单句能表达的时候却用了从句，那就一定有问题。 ●没有必要使用从句 下面的例子说明作者没有掌握基本的表达法，因此不该使用从句的地方却使用了从句。 原 稿：One of these changes is that the computer emerged, which can nearly be seen in the every corner of the world. 改后稿：One of these changes is the emergence of the computer in nearly every corner of the world. 简评：很多同学对emergence不熟悉，往往只会使用一个词的一个词性，但是忘了另一个。通常是忘了更简单的名词词性。 原 稿：Another aspect which is worthy of mention here is that the vision of people is greatly broadened, who are now more open-minded and ambitious. 改后稿：Another result worthy of mentioning is the broadening view and open-mindedness of people in general. 原 稿：If it is easier for us to communicate, it’s easier to make friends and enjoy life. 改后稿：The ease of communication helps us to enjoy life more. 原 稿：They point out that although there are five official languages in the UN, the most useful of which is English which is the first foreign language for most people 改后稿：They point out that of the five official UN languages, English is the most useful and the mother tongue of most people. 简评：在这句话中使用简单的介词of或者among都可以解决问题，根本用不着使用从句。 原 稿：In many universities second foreign languages are provided as optional courses for students who are willing as well as qualified to take them 改后稿：Many universities offer an optional second foreign language course for willing and qualified students. 简评：willing和qualified是形容词，可以直接修饰名词。许多同学学习了从句以后，可能所有的精力都放在更复杂的语法现象上，反而忘了最简单的表达法。 有时候用分词短语的效果也会不错，但是很少有同学用分词短语。 原 稿：Agriculture, which is identified as the First Industry, is quite important for China. As an agricultural country, it still plays an important role in the national economy. 改后稿：Agriculture, identified as the “first industry” in China, plays an important role in the national economy. 简评：我国大学生很少使用分词短语，非要用一个从句。 原 稿：The recommended age to study abroad is at least after 22 years old