英语四级写作范文及评分标准.doc

PAGE PAGE 3 \o 英语四级写作范文赏析 英语四级写作范文赏析 一篇四级的图画作文，对照下自己的作文属于哪一类？按照总分15分的标准。 作文题目：Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay. You should start your essay with a brief description of the picture and then express your views on water pollution. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.范文一（差）： In this picture it show us about two fishes dialogue. We can know the water was not so fresh because the fishes cant live in there more than three days. From this short dialogue in picture we need though, why fish want to told other fishes cant use the water. It was obviously that the water was been polluted. Nowadays, with the country develop, lots of factory in order to get much money and more convenient, then put the water that was polluted into the river. Water is the source of full life. We need clean water, so do animals. Why we so selfish to make little money then make the water dirty. It also harmful for us. We should tell everyone protect animals is also means protect us.评分：4分评语：基本切题，连贯性差，大部分句子都有错误，有较多的严重语言错误，如第一句it是第三人称单数，后面的动词show应该是shows，且用法是show sb. sth.，about不需要；第二段的两句话都存在语法错误，want to told ，was been polluted等；一些句子缺少谓语，如It also harmful for us。范文二（中等）：water pollution As is vividly showed in the picture, a fish told to another fish the water of sea cant be used for three days and hope each fish knows that then to leave there. The implied meaning of the picture should be taken into account seriously. Then the reason is that the human pollute the water and at last fishes have no place to live. In my opinion, we need take some measures to reduce water pollution. To begin with that, we know some factories sewage in the river in order to saving more money. So the government should make the law to impose restrictions on the factories discharge capacity. Secondly, we should have a award of protecting the water. In our daily life, we should use the detergent without phosphorus and so on.The social problem has ar