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SAT写作实例修改一

SAT写作是整个SAT考试的第一部分，要求在25分钟内写完。很多高中生反映写不好SAT作文，得分很低。所以在这里为同学们举几个作文修改例子，供同学们学习和借鉴，希望对准备参加SAT考试的同学有一些帮助。

Topic:Teachingsomethingtoanotherpersoncanhelpyoutolearnormasterasubjectorprocess?

Thinkcarefullyabouttheissuepresentedinthefollowingexcerptandassignmentbelow.

“Ifyouwouldthoroughlyknowanything,teachittoothers.Onewhoceasestolearncannotadequatelyteach.”-TryonEdwards,DictionaryofThoughts

Assignment:Doyouthinkthatteachingsomethingtoanotherpersoncanhelpyoutolearnormasterasubjectorprocess?Planandwriteanessayinwhichyoudevelopyourpointofviewonthisissue.Supportyourpositionwithreasoningandexamplestakenfromyourreading,studies,experiences,orobservations.

本段评点

这一段话虽然立刻表明了作者自己的立场，但是内容不饱满，大多叙述是重复和多余的。比如，Itmeans这一句完全是多余的。TryonEdwards说的话本来很明白，浅显，不用再解释

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一遍。或者，可以说自己的那句解释，但是不用引用TryonEdwards的那句话。

学生习作（第二段）

语言修改

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Attheageoffifteen,Iwasaseniormiddleschoolstudent.BecauseIalwaysscored

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