12 情感描写——感动.pptVIP

父亲的语言描写(_______________________)→父亲的动作描写(_______________________)→母亲的表情和语言描写(______________________________)→母亲的动作描写(_______________________)→母亲的心理活动描写(___________)基于第二段的框架，我们可以补充以下细节：期待母亲拆礼物送母亲礼物抱怨消失惊讶、抱怨之余，更感动、难忘多的是感动看到裙子，第四步，检查优化，整洁誊写Paragraph1：Dadlookedquicklyandsmiled,“Yes,itisnotthere!”“Butwhowouldliketobuythatsillydress?”Mommarveled(感到惊奇).Fathersaidcasually,“Forgetit.Maybesomeonerichwouldbuyitforhiswife.”Hearingthewords,motherforcedasmileandmurmured,“Yes,shewillbemovedtotears.”Myfatherrealizedshefeltdisappointed.However,asmileappearedonhisface.Itwasthemysterious(神秘的)smilethatimmediatelyclicked(使豁然开朗)me.Iknewuponimaginingthescenethatmovesmymomdeeplywhenreceivingthegift,hefeltdelighted.Paragraph2：I’llneverforgetthatChristmasmorningwhenfatherhandedmotherabox.Fatherexclaimed(大声说),“MerryChristmas!”eyeinghiswifeexpectantly(期待地).Asmotheropenedthebox,thetwinklingstarsonthedresstouchingherheartdeeply,shescreamed.Turningaround,shecomplained,“Youshouldn’twastemoney.”However,thebeautifulredsatindressmeltedherheart,andsoonthecomplaintdisappeared.Herpalmssweating,throattighteningandtearsstreamingdownherface,shewastouchedbeyondwords.Amongallthenicemomentsinherlife,neverwouldsheforgetthismovingone.[范文亮点]文章的画面感强，让人读了能够在脑海中呈现出感人的画面，与阅读材料所传递的主题相符合。另外，内容环环相扣，段落间衔接紧密而自然，条理清楚，语言流畅，可读性、逻辑性强。第一段中的设计主要是发生在车上，母亲提出疑问→父亲漫不经心地回答→父亲想象妻子收到礼物的情景。在第二段中，父亲送母亲礼物→母亲情感的变化（抱怨→感动）。另外，文章句式丰富，能够巧妙运用了独立主格结构、倒装句、分词作状语、with的复合结构及状语从句等。用词多样化、生动，如：marvel,exclaim,click等，这使文章增色不少。同时，细节描写真实，故事情节合理，扣人心弦。Thankyou!*读后续写早读晚练情感描写——感动必备单词_________vt.感动_________vt.感动_________vt.打动_________vt.使感动___________adj.深受感动的_________vt.打动早读——积累素材movetouchaffectimpressimpressedstir高级词块________________深深感动某人__________________被感动得热泪盈眶__________________触动某人的