《《写作160篇》大作文经典必备20篇读者习作点评（高）.》.pdf

2014版考研1号英语《写作160篇》第一本考研英语话题写作书 全面涵盖当年可考话题连续8年命中写作原题 2014 版《写作 160 篇》经典必备 30 篇大作文读者习作点评 1.社会热点类 一、山寨文化 小周 2012 年 10 月 21 日 写作原文 ①Nowadays fake products are becoming more and more. ②In this picture,we can see that a man is brushing a vase symbolizing Shanzhai product and want （改为wants ） to make it （去掉） a fake product. ③Behind of （去掉）him, there are a lot of fake vases that have been forged by him. ④What he think （改为thinks ） is money. ①This phenonmenon （改为phenomenon ） that we called Shanzhai culture is so common in our life. ②We can see cottage products （加here and there ）such as cellphone, medicine, MP3 and so on . ③Although these products means （改为mean ） cheeper （改为cheaper ） prices, they have a bad influence on our society. ④First of all, we can’t guareetee （改为guarantee ） the quality of these cottage products. ⑤Sometimes the quality is crucial to us. ⑥An abundant of examples have proved this point. ⑦For example, fake medicine lead （改为leads ） to the death of a patient （改为patients ）. ⑧Besides, a lot of businessman （改为businessmen ） pay more attention to profits and money （去掉）, not the quality of the products. ⑨This will ruined （改为ruin ） the image of a company and make people lose faith in them, which will be a disaster to a company. ①As far as I am concerned, we should do our best to fight aginst （改为against ） the cottage products, and potect the well-known product with high quality. ②At the same time, we should also have some legislations, and carry them out strictly. 原作点评 第一段点评 第一段描述简单描述图片内容：一个正在忙于制作赝品花瓶的人，满脑子想的都是钱。 ②句中 want 应为单数。主谓一致问题； make 后面的 it 去掉，直接跟名词，表示“制作”。用法错误。 ③句中 of 去掉，介词 behind 后面可直接跟 him 。 ④句中 think 应为单数。主谓一致问题。 is 后面加just ，表示此人此刻心中只有钱，加强语气。 第二段点评 第二段概述山寨产品的负面影响，不但对消费者有害，而且严重影响公司形象及客户。 ③句中 means 主谓一致问题 ⑤⑥句本身意义上联系紧密，整合成一句话意思更完整。建议改为 Sometimes the quality is crucial to us, which can be improved by an