Personal Statement 写作终极建议.docx

personal statement 写作终极建议：附伯克利大学文科PhD申请成功的PS原文以及伯克利老师的细致点评！pdf原文请去微博xwuesjsattva，上面有一条微博写这个的微盘上下载 作者： 严雪文sjsattva我自己的感觉是，PS不仅仅是看你是不是essentially relevant, training/expertise/research experience, 最关键的还是那些非常软的东西，就是你怎么写，而不是写了啥。。1. Philology!语言，用词，句法。我不是在说用于是不是地道或者正确，我是在说你的PS如果能写作style的语言非常高端，对评审老师而言非常重 要。（真的真的真的。intellectual pretentiousness在这时候会变成你非常厉害，读过书的证明。也许我说的只是文科。）所以，不要认为一个native speaker就一定能改好你的文章，那往往只是改错而已。英语单词实在太博大精深。详见我附的例子中那个老师是如何如何Obsessed with the choice of words and the writing style.2. Structure and logic! 我不是在说你一定要按照一个模版讲一个故事。但是每段的结构是必须这样的：一个有逻辑的总起句，除非你能一个场景、一个引号吸引读者注意（但那一般也只是 第一段。。），然后解释、举例，然后结论。一定一定一定是这样！好文章都是这样的！相信我！一个总起句！不能超过两行，把一段说清楚。3. 重要的不是你写你做了什么，而是你对你做的是如何思考的，给了你什么启示，你如何反思你的“成就”的，和你想申这个学位有毛线关系。（要知道各种申请的人 中简历牛逼的肯定很多，经历牛逼的也许更多。千万别把你的PS变成扩展版的简历哦！）无论是学术申请，写书、写理论、写研究；还是应用型学科申请，写研 究、写实习、写课程；你重点永远不是你读了这本书，这本书主要内容是什么，我觉得好有趣啊！而是，这个内容为什么有趣了？对你之后的研究有什么启迪和灵感 了？否则，你不是纯粹在卖弄你干过神马吗= =废话少说，上范文。。。注脚是伯克利老师的评价。Luscious fare is the jewel of inordinate desires,1 cautions2 the author of The Gentlewomans Companion (1673), one of many early modern conduct books I surveyed this past year for an honors thesis entitled Chaste, Silent, and Hungry: The Problem of Female Appetite in Early Modern England, 1550-1700.3 As indicated by the title, this project explores a provocative but as of yet scarcely studied facet of early modern gender constructions: female food desire.4 I use the word desire here rather deliberately, as early modern definitions of appetite extended well beyond the physiological drive to eat to encompass all those physical (and shameful) longings associated with the body. And, in a culture where women were by definition immoderate and sensual, female food appetite, I argue, constituted an unruly5 desire that demanded both social and moral discipline. In brief, my research concerns the patriarchal control of womens bodies in sixteenth and seventeenth-century England vis-a?-vis a cultural idea about food desire and satiation as suggestive and immodest.6 In lieu