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CET-4 写作中的“亮点”意识 大学英语四级作文要拿高分，学生就要了解评分标准。CET-4作文评分分五个档，标准如下： 2分：条理不清，思路紊乱，语言支离破碎或大部分句子均有错误，且多数为严重错误； 5分：基本切题，表达思想不够清楚，连贯性差，有较多的严重语言错误； 8分：基本切题，表达思想比较清楚，文章尚连贯，但语言错误较多，其中有少量的严重错误； 11分：切题，表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错误； 14分：切题，表达思想清楚，文字通顺，连贯性较好，基本上无语言错误。 字数不够扣分（各段已给出的主题句均不得计入）。段落不够扣分。 对于四级作文的评分标准,还有一个更为形象的说法。这五个档次依次是： 一塌糊涂；糊里糊涂；马马虎虎；清清爽爽；漂漂亮亮。 实际上，要想四级作文清清爽爽乃至漂漂亮亮，使分数处于11分和14档，作文中必须有亮点。亮点可以体现在不同的层面：选词层面上的亮点，如要多用动作动词代替抽象动词，避免相同词语无意义的重复使用；句法上的亮点, 多变的句型,一定的修辞手段,以及一些英语特有的警句和格言；段落层面和全文结构上的亮点，主要体现在 “行文的自然流畅和段落的合理衔接”上,当然也包括整体风格的一致。 作文评分范例 下面我们通过比较两篇四级作文（注：每段的首句题目已给出）来了 解评分标准以及作文中亮点的重要性。 Women are playing an increasingly important part in society today. Many women today are playing an important part at works that was thought only could be done by the men before. For example, some women are not secretary in the office, instead , they become manager of a company. With the changes in their social role, woman’s position in the family has been improved as well. In the world today, more and more women have their own jobs. They get their own salary, and become more independent from their husband. With the economic situation improved, their family position is improving. In spite of these changes, the liberation of woman has not been completely realized. Many husbands only want his wife to stay at home, and do some works or do some shopping. They only want their wife to be a housewife, but not a manager of a company. 该作文为8分作文。基本切题，思想表达尚清楚，基本连贯，有个别严重的语言错误及用词不当，但可以理解。另外，文章中无论词语和句子层面都没有亮点。文中除了independent from外，没有亮点词汇。句式结构单调，文中除了一个包含定语从句的复合句Many women today are playing an important part at works that was thought only could be done by the men before之外，其他的都是简单句。 II. Women are playing an increasingly important part in society today. In many countries, more and more women are acting as workers, farmers, scientists and even leaders. We can say that almost all jobs which men can do are done perfectly by women. Women are no longer looked down upon by society. With t