书面表达评讲课件.ppt.ppt

* 书 面 表 达 讲 评 ------马松燕 Learning aims(学习目标）: 1.Talk about the last written expression assessment (评讲书面表达） 2. Write another essay（写书面表达) 本次书面表达成绩分析： ≥20分：16个 15～19分：20个 命题特点： 本次书面表达是材料作文，是我们日常生活中的小事 ，内容明确要求简单，大家有话可写，但又不能随便写，所以作业内容差别不大，结果比较令人满意。希望大家继续努力。 书面表达评讲 假如你是王明，你家两个月前买了一台冰箱，但昨天出了故障，现在不能正常工作了，并发出一种怪音，你妈妈每周一至周五下午2点以后在家，请你给商场经理写封信要求他尽快派人来修。 要求：词数100字左右，可适当添加。 材料再现： 体裁 时态 人称 时态 共性问题1： 1.I hope you can sent someone to have it repaired. (许艳艳 张灿） 2. It doesn’t work and make a strange noise . （张玉乔 董路路) 4. What was worse, it makes a strange noise .(王郑阳) 5. You can come after 2 o’clock, and at that time my mother at home.(柴晶晶） 6. I’m looking forward receiving your reply as soon as possible.（张玉乔 张佳丽） 7. I hope you can set a people to my home as soon as possible.（刘梦莹） send makes is is to send person 谓语动词 共性问题2： 1.When you come ，you can call me at the number is 14677665873.（高吉） 2. I hope you to have the fridge repaired as soon as possible. （樊园红） wish 句式错 共性问题3： We bought a fridge in your shop two monthes ago.（鲁晓 刘志琴 王运） 2.I can’t repair it . My mother can’t repair it ,too. （吴洋） 3.The atress is XingFu Road.（张静) 4. It often made a strange voice and it...... (刘志琴） 5. I’m looking forward to your come.（李梦霞） 错词 months either address noise coming 共性问题4： My mother will come back at afternoon 2 o’clock p.m. from Monday to Friday. （王运 董路路） 中式英语 范文欣赏： July10,2009 Dear Sir, Two months ago, my mother bought a fridge in your shop.It had been working well till yesterday. I think there must be something wrong with it . It doesn’t work any longer and there is a strange noise coming from the back of it. Would you please send someone to have a look at it? My mother is at home after 2:00p.m from Monday to Friday .I’m looking forward to your reply . Thank you very much. Address: Room 106 Building 9 Hongxing Street Tel: