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通过高考作文分析指导写作;书面表达的五个步骤; 假设你是卜曼宜,你购买了一部某外国公司生产的手机.因有质量问题,要求该公司更换.请根据下列要点,用英文写一封电子邮件. 1.问题: 手机不响铃,不能发短信;该产品已售完,无法更换;型号新,无配件,无法维修. 2.要求: 公司应尽快予以更换. 注意:1.词数为100左右; 2.参考词汇: 配件(spare part);Think about……?;The style: exposition The main idea: Present the problems with the phone and ask for a change Person: the first person Tense: the present tense (描述具体经历时则要用一般过去时);2.提炼要点，确定重点词汇;2.提炼要点，确定重点词汇;3.连词成句;3.型号新,无配件,无法维修 It is a new model in China. It is impossible to fix it without the right spare parts. 4.要求公司应尽快予以更换 I demand of /require/request your company to change a new one for me as soon as possible.;4. 组句成篇;（1）适当添加信息点;（2）巧妙使用连接词;（2）巧妙使用连接词;（3）灵活运用好句式;1. 手机不响铃,不能发短信 整合前： It doesn’t ring . It doesn’t send short messages. 整合后： a. It can’t ring or send short messages. b. It doesn’t ring at all and meanwhile it doesn’t send short messages. （并列句）;c. It can neither ring nor send short messages. d. Not only does it fail to ring, but also it can’t send a message. (倒装句句式) e.The mobile phone can’t ring, nor can it send messages.（同上）;2.该产品已售完,无法更换 整合前：The model has been sold out . They can’t change a new one for me. 整合后： a.The new model has been sold out so that they can’t change a new one for me .（结果状语从句）;b. The model has been sold out,as a consequence, it’s impossible for them to change a new one for me.（It作形式主语） c. The model has been sold out, which makes it impossible for me to have a new one. (非限制性定语从句);d. The fact that the model has been sold out makes me unable to change it.（主语从句） e. This kind of phones has been sold out . Therefore, I have no approaches to exchanging the phone for a new one. （副词）;3.型号新,无配件,无法维修 整合前： It is a new model in China. It is impossible to fix it without the right spare parts. 整合后： a.Since it’s a new model and there’re no spare parts,I can’t get it repaired .（原因状语从句）;b.So new is its type without any spare parts that I can’t get it repaired.(倒装句) c.With its new type and no spare parts left, I find it hard to have it repaired.（