cohenrence.pptVIP

Effective Sentences;Coherence: ---faulty parallel constructions ---pronouns with ambiguous reference ---dangling or misplaced modifiers ---confusing shifts in person and number, or in voice, tense, and mood ;Faulty: A man is judged not only by what he says but also by his deeds. Revised: A man is judged not only by what he says but also by what he does. Or : A man is judged not only by his words but also by his deeds. ;Faulty: We thought she was charming, intelligent, and a very capable young woman. Revised: We thought she was charming, intelligent and very capable. Or: We thought she was a charming, intelligent, and very capable young woman. ;Faulty: We have great faith and high hopes for her. Revised: We have great faith in and high hopes for her. ;Faulty: She told my sister that she was wrong. Revised: “I’m wrong.” she said to my sister. Or: She admitted that she was wrong and said so to my sister. Or: “You’re wrong.” she said to my sister. Or: My sister was told that she was wrong. ;Faulty: He was knocked down by a bicycle, but it was not serious. Revised: He was knocked down by a bicycle, but was not badly hurt. ;Faulty: Looking out of the window, the grassland stretches as far as the eye can reach. Revised: Looking out of the window, he can see the grassland stretching as far as the eye can reach. ;Faulty: On entering the classroom, the students stood up and said, “Good morning!” Revised: When the teacher entered the classroom, the students stood up and said, “Good morning!” ;Faulty: To get ready for the trip, all the things she needed were put into a suitcase. Revised: To get ready for the trip, she put all the things she needed into a suitcase. ;To be frank; generally speaking; judging by; speaking of Judging by what the newspapers have said, his latest play is quit successful. To be frank, he is not the right man for this important job. ;Faulty: An important thing for the student to remember is that when writing a paper, you should not