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学生作文 VS. 满分作文 Olivia TOPIC Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology designed to make people’s lives simpler actually turns out to make people’s lives more complicated. Organization 1. Beginning; 2. Supporting 1; 3. Supporting 2; 4. Ending. 总结起来，四个方面: 1 整篇结构（每部分篇幅及如何展开）； 2 段落结构（段落中每句的作用，主题 or 例证）； 3 句式的多样性（丰富的句式结构）； 4 用词的多样性和准确性（准确、简洁的表达）。 Beginner As society develops, technology is playing a more and more important role. The intelligent technology makes what we never think of into reality and thus making people’s lives simpler than ever. Recent years, a debate over the influence of modern technology on people has become increasingly fierce. And this trend seems to be the hit topic for the near future as the fast development of technology in all fields. Some people assert that it makes our lives more complicated. However, from my perspective, our lives are being more convenient thanks to the technology. Just imagine yourself traveling back to 50 years ago. And my reasons are to be discussed in the following . support 1 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　Firstly, technology makes it possible for people to communicate more frequently than ever. In the past, people can hardly communicate with others due to the long distance. Writing letters is the most common way, however, it costs a lot of time and sometimes the letters may get lost in the way to the receivers or unable to the destination because of the wrong address. While in today’s world, we are access to abundant advanced equipment such as telephones, computers and internet, which enable us to contact others more easily and abridge the distance. For example, when festival comes, you can give your wishes or blessing to your parents or relatives immediately; when you are in trouble, you can call your friends and ask them to assist you right away. Without the advanced technology,