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从一篇学生习作看高考英语写作教与学 关键词 议论文 时态 语态 词语 如下是一篇高考英语模拟题写作，是来自我学生的真实习作。 The earth is person’s mother. She give us life. Today, we can live so comfortable and enjoy every beautiful things. But we forget our mother’s feeling .We give her acid rain, nuclear waste, poisonous waste and ozone layer depletion, even we give her polluted oceans and streams. Is this our way to treat our mother? Earth mother become more and more tired for us, so it’s possible to burn down everything that she gave us ,so we must change our mind to treat our mother, we should protect the nature and environment. We must try our best to damage less things that may hurt our’s mother. 原题是一则有关地球污染的看图写作，重点单词如acid rain，nuclear waste ，ozone layer depletion等均已给出。对这一写作话题，学生并不陌生，教材曾有相关文章，但因为所要求的几项内容并非日常常用词汇所能表达，还是有一定难度。我们看得出文中出现了定语从句that she gave us、不定式to treat our mother、过去分词polluted oceans and streams、句型It is possible to do sth….等，很出彩，从而使文章层次分明，逻辑性较强，整体处于中上水平，同时也出现了在学生中具有一定代表性的问题，如：单数第三人称主谓一致、整体文章时态一致、词性问题、所有格、语句衔接等等。稍做改正，文章如下： The earth is our mother. She gives us life. Therefore, we may live comfortably and enjoy every beautiful thing. But what do we give to her? We forget her feeling and give her acid rain, nuclear waste, poisonous waste and ozone layer depletion. We even give her polluted oceans and streams. There is no doubt that the earth has been polluted seriously. Is this our way to treat our mother? Earth mother becomes more and more tired because of us. It is likely that everything that she gives us may be damaged .so we must make up our mind to treat our mother kindly. we should protect nature and the environment and damage less things so that the earth would not be hurt. 在高考英语写作中得高分并非易事，要有英语知识作基础。知识的获取是无捷径的，而高考写作技巧却有稍许窍门可寻。近年高考写作以议论为主。英语议论文根据命题特点，从形式上来看可分为如下类型:① “一分为二”的观点．如网络对学生可能产生的影响;② “两者选一”的观点．如乘火车还是乘飞机;③“我认为……”型．如你对家教的看法;④“怎样……（how to）”型．如怎样克服学习中碰到的困难;⑤ 图表作文．通过阅读图表中的数字与项目得出一个结论或形成一种看法． 议论文通过议论或说理来表达作者见解和主张.作者对某一问题持有一种看法,为了使读者同意自己的看法,提出若干理由,企图说服他人.高中英语议论文的写作要注意以下要点:1. 论点要鲜明、确切．一篇议论文