五年级作文批改评语（Five grade composition correction comment）.doc

五年级作文批改评语（Five grade composition correction comment） Five grade composition correction comment - - Five grade composition correction comment First, the beginning of 1, concise language, norms, the opening attractive. 2, the opening is brief, concise and orderly. The emphasis is on the description and the impression. In 3, King Yu, the beginning is quite new; at the beginning of the flashback, artistic rendering. 4. The beginning is lively, and the use of personification makes the beginning appear lively. 5, the beginning of the novel, has claimed. Enable readers to meet and produce characters... Impression. *6, the beginning of the article is too simple, can exaggerate the environment, make up a paragraph? Two, the structure of 1, a brief description of the wonderful place, point and surface combination. 2, transition nature, each paragraph is very clear. 3, scenes and atmosphere description for the article to add a lot of; a wonderful description of the place briefly; combination of points and surfaces. 4, brief introduction of the situation, the natural transition to the next paragraph; 5, a brief account of the antecedent, foreshadowing. *6, this part may join the dialogue or some psychological description, the article link is more natural. Three, language 1, make full use of language, action, psychological description, make things specific and vivid 2, the natural link between the preceding and the next, the details of the description, highlighting the quality of characters, moving 3, the personification of language makes the article more lively 4, the shape description is very interesting, highlighted... Lovely. Introduced into their own ideas, there is infection. With the method of * * *, very image. 5, the use of metaphor, personification and other rhetorical devices, the image of the written...... Beauty. Use the appropriate metaphor. Joined ancient poetry, Lenovo, rich charm. *6, this section refers to the examples in the text, the language is too flat, can