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怎样让书面表达 文 采 飞 扬 Beyond the simple sentence 首师大附属密云中学 宋玉双 高考英语书面表达评分原则： 评分时，应注意的主要内容为：内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性及上下文的连贯性。 第一档（18—20分）： 1.All the points covered. 2.Advanced words and varied grammatical structures. 3.Efficient proper links to make the whole passage coherent and compact. 2008年北京高考 假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华，为校刊英语园地写一篇题为“Our Spring Outing” 的英文稿件。 请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，叙述上周你们班从准备春游到春游结束的完整过程。 注意： 词数不少于60. 提示词： 游乐园 amusement park 垃圾箱 bin Last week, our class organized a spring outing. To make this memorable activity more wonderful, we discussed the destination carefully and finally decided to go mountain climbing instead of other choices like playing in an amusement park and going boating. With high spirits, we started our spring outing on a fine day. Flowers presented us with their sweetest smiles and we were soaked up in the warm sunshine. However, we were shocked when we reached the top of the mountain, waste bottles and used packages were thrown everywhere, which totally ruined the beauty of the nature. Feeling a great pity for the tourists, we picked up the rubbish and carefully divided them into 2 groups: the recycle ones and the non-recycle ones. After that, we put the rubbish into the bin differently. We call on awareness on protecting our environment which is of great importance. Though cleaning up the rubbish was a tough task, our hearts were filed with joy and we’ll remember the thing for ever. 19分。内容要点齐全，描述的语句丰富，上下文连贯，有效使用了语句间的连接成分。仅个别用词错误，体现了较强的语言运用能力。 Last week, our class organized a spring outing. To make this memorable activity more wonderful, we discussed the destination carefully and finally decided to go mountain climbing instead of other choices like playing in an amusement park and going boating. With high spirits, we started our spring outing on a fine day. Flowers presented us with their sweetest smiles and we were soaked up in the warm sunshine. However, we were shocked when we reached