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作文病句： （请一边听老师分析，一边记录或在你的原文处修改重要要点） U3 第一大错：遗漏要素 （如：天气很好；品尝青岛食品。漏一个点扣3分） 第二大错：人称错（文章要求介绍Green一家人的假期计划，有人文章却用了we/I等人称，人称错扣3分） 第三大错：时态错（既然是写“假期计划”当然主体要用一般将来时，有人却过多使用一般过去时！如：They planned···） They’re going there for a week. 诊断： go为不可延续动词，不能和for +段连用！ 改：They’re staying there for a week. The Greens is going to Qing Dao for their vacation. 诊断：The Greens格林一家人为复数，be 动词要用are 中国地名拼写：开头字母大写其余全部小写而且无空格 改： The Greens are going to Qingdao for their vacation. They’re going to swimming in the sea. 诊断：be going to do 改： They’re going to swim in the sea. They’ll have an excited vacation. 诊断：形容物的特性的形容词应为ing结尾 改： They’ll have an exciting vacation. They will very happy. 诊断：will 后应用动词原形 改：They will be very happy. U4 第一大错：most/many/some/a small number of使用混乱 第二大错：遗漏要素（如：列出至少两个理由，只写了一个。漏一个要素扣3分） 第三大错：表述含混不清，感觉似乎是一个理由又似乎是两个理由，让批卷老师举棋不定（如：Walking is interesting and very good）解决这个问题最好是分两句写，而且清晰的表述出两个理由立场（如：Walking is very interesting. I also think walking is good for my health.） 第四大错：最喜欢的方式应该只写一个，有人写了好几个！！ Every day students take the different transportation to go to school. 诊断：想怎么说怎么说，从没见过的所谓表达方式什么都敢用！自我感觉良好，其实根本没这种说法！ 改：Every day students go to school in different ways of transportation. I think take bus to school is quickly. 诊断：一、动词做主语没用ing 二、单数名词不能独立使用 三、be 动词后用形容词不是副词 改：I think taking buses to school is quick. I can spend less money to go to school. 诊断：平时的固定动词结构掌握很差！spend···doing 改：I can spend less money going to school. You’ll be more healthy. 诊断：词汇结构掌握差。 改：You’ll be healthier. There are 20 students go to school by bus. 诊断：想怎么说怎么说，中国式英语！根本没有There be sb do结构 改：①20 students go to school by bus. ② There are 20 students who go to school by bus. I go to school on foot for 15 minutes. 诊断：句型结构闻所未闻。 改：It takes me 15 minutes to go to school on foot. That can let me relaxing. 诊断：一、没有let sb+adj结构 二、表示人的感受用ed结尾的形容词 改：That can make me relaxed. By bus go to school students are 20. 诊断：中国式英语！语法结构完全错误 改：20 students go to school by bus. The number of students by bike is 2. 诊断：不能直接用介词