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作文评分标准 2分……条理不清，思路紊乱，语言支离破碎或在部分句子均有错误，且多数为严重错误。 5分……基本切题。表达思想不清楚，连贯性差。有较多的严重语言错误。 8分……基本切题。有些地方表达思想不够清楚，文字勉强连贯；语言错误相当多，其中有一些是严重错误。 11分……切题。表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错误。 14分……切题。表达思想清楚，文字通顺，连贯性好。基本上无语言错误，仅有个别小错误。 注：1.白卷，作文与题目毫不相关，或只有几个孤立的词而无法表达思想，则给0分。 2..达不到规定词数的要酌情扣1~5分。（注意：题目中所给的起始句、主题句、结束句，不计入所写字数。）3.规定为三段式的作文，只写一段为0~4分， 只写2段为0~9分。 作文题目：?“Women?in?the?Modern?World” 作文提纲：?  1.?Women?are?playing?an?increasingly?important?part?in?society?today.________  2.?With?the?changes?in?their?social?role,?women’s?position?in?the?family?has?been?improved?as?well.?______  3.?In?spite?of?these?changes,?the?liberation?of?women?has?not?been?completely?realized.?__  例1．?（2分段）  Women?are?playing?an?increasingly?important?part?in?society?today.?Long?age,?women?only?did?something?in?the?kitchen?or?at?home.?Now?many?of?them?have?serious?jobs?to?serve?for?people.?What?men?can?do?so?can?women.? With?the?changes?in?their?social?role,?women?position?in?the?family?has?been?improved?as?well.?Today?in?the?family,?the?wife?often?lots?her?husband?to?do?something?at?home?bat?ago,?only?women?did?something.?Men?are?fond?of?doing?something?at?home.? In?spite?of?these?changes,?the?liberation?of?women?has?not?been?completely?realized.?Sometimes,?the?matter,?the?husband?hitting?has?welf,?often?happened.?In?the?factory,?the?women?to?as?much?as?the?men,?but?they?are?paid?less?than?the?men.?Some?people?have?not?completely?realized?the?liberation?of?women.?  条理不清，思路紊乱，大部分句子均有错误，有的甚至影响理解。具体问题剖析如下： (1)缺乏逻辑，东一句西一句，没有围绕中心论述，如第一段就没有展开论述妇女社会角色的转变，说得太笼统而缺乏说服力。? （2）用汉语思维，句子有明显的汉语痕迹，如“What?men?can?do?so?can?women?can?do?what?men?can?do”。? （3）衔接不自然，没有用适当的关联词，如“Sometimes,?the?matter,?the?husband?hitting?has?welf,?often?happened”，应改为“The?case?that?husband?hits?his?wife?often?happens.?”? （4）拼写错误很多，大部分句子均有错误。?  例2．（5分段?） Women?are?playing?an?increasingly?important?part?in?society?today.?In?today,?many?women?have?a?work.?They?worked?as?well?as?men?playing?an?important?part?in?factories.?There?are?ma