演示文档高考二轮复习 如何写申请信.pptVIP

【学生习作】 Dear Ms Chen, Im Li Hua, a student from Class 2, Grade 3.?Im writing to apply for the position as a student volunteer. There are many reasons why I put in for the position. To begin with, I can enable myself to gain some valuable life experience as well as work skills. Secondly, I think making friends with people as a volunteer would be a wonderful thing. Besides, volunteering would provide me with a good opportunity to contribute to our school and break 优选 down barriers of understanding so that I can build self-confidence through it. I think Im qualified for the position. Im kind by nature, easy-going and always ready to help others. I have a good character, being confident and independent in life. Whats more, English is my favorite subject and Ive won several prizes in English contests, which will help me make your good choice. Id appreciate it if you could give me the opportunity to prove myself. Looking forward to your reply. ??????????????????????????????????????????????????????? Yours truly, ??????????????????????????????????????????????????????? Li Hua 优选 【点评】 该习作完成了试题规定的任务: 覆盖了所有内容要点，应用了较多的复杂语法结构(定语从句、宾语从句、状语从句、非谓语动词等)和高级词汇(put in for, enable, contribute to, barrier, by nature, appreciate等)，有效地使用了语句间的连接成分(to begin with, secondly, besides, what‘s more等)。存在的问题主要有： 一、部分表达不够精炼(如I can enable myself to)或语义重复(如第三段第二和第三句)； 优选 二、部分内容缺乏逻辑性(如第二段末句中的break down barriers of understanding so that I can build self-confidence through it)； 三、部分内容表义不清(如which will help me make your good choice)。 此外，虽然本题写作要求中有关词数的部分只有下限没有上限，但也不宜写太多内容(本文148词)。否则一方面会占用过多的考试时间，另一方面也会增加出错的机率。 优选 【改后稿】 Dear Ms Chen, Im Li Hua, a student from Class 2, Grade 3.?Im writing to apply for the position as a student volunteer. There are many reasons why I put in for the position. To begin with, I can gain some valuable life experience as well as work skills. Secondly, I think making friends with people as a volunteer would be a wonderful thing. Besides, volunteering would provide me with a good opport