高考英语写作 句子美化.pptVIP

Yang Yonghua  Compare the following sentences 我们学校位于宋家堡,它就像一座花园,满园皆是 美丽的花朵、青草绿树,鸟儿吟唱、蝴蝶飞舞于其 间 1.Our school lies at Songjiabao. It is really like a garden. There are beautiful flowers, green grass and trees. Birds are singing and butterflies are flying among them 2. Lying at Songjiabao, our school is really like a garden which is covered with beautiful flowers, green grass and trees with birds sIngIng and butterflies flying among them  高考作文评分标准 第六档(很好);(26-30分)1.完全完成了试题规定的任务。 2覆盖所有内容要点。3.应用了较多的语法结构和词汇 4.语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误,但为尽力使用较复 杂结构或较高级词汇所致;具备较强的语言运用能力。 5.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑 6完全达到了预期的写作目的。 第五档(好):(21-25分)1.完全完成了试题规定的任务 2.虽漏掉1、2个次重点,但覆盖所有主要内容 3.应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求 4.语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确,些许错误主要是 因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。 5.应用简单的语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑。 6.达到了预期的写作目的。 从中我们可以看出在写作中运用高级词汇和较多的语法结 构是提高写作档次的重要标准。  、如何使用高级词汇 1.择词要准确、贴切。 He is a good man. He is a kind-hearted man He is good-looking. He is handsome 在选择词语时,要避免用上位词来代替下位词, 特别是形容词和副词。如good是上位词,而要描 写一个人不能只说 He is a good man.而应该用 相应的下位词来表达更准确的意思。如: generous,kind- hearted等。同样地,描写某人 的长相,也不能只用good- looking,而应该选择 handsome, attractive,sim等词汇,使之具体 化,更贴切、更形象  2.避免重复、富有变化。 在一段话或一篇文章中有时需要表达同样的意思, 这时可以选用不同的词汇来表达,以避免重复和 单调,从而使文章富有变化。但不要绝对化,有 时适当的重复是必要的 The Beijing olympic Games show that China can do something big and splendid. Also they show that China has been becoming increasingly strong and powerful.  3.表达新颖、寻求亮点。 It is I increasingly difficult to find jobs in China nowadays Its really a challenging task for me 选词时适当选用别人使用较少的词,可以使自己 与众不同,从而取得出奇制胜的效果。  4.短语替词、展示实力。 (1)The boy is badly off but he never loses hope(同义词poor) 2 )I have made up my mind to study English better this term(同义词 decided) ( 3)I have no idea how to enlarge my vocabulary 同义词don t know) (4)We will take the matter into account (同义词 consider) /consideration (5 He is fond of music so much that he de votes much time to it.(同义词lkes) 如果能用短语代替单词,一方面会使文章生动, 另一方面则会展示你的实力,这会使阅卷老师对 你刮目相看,从而提高文章的档次。  5.巧用习语、引人入胜。 (1)He