英译汉理论和实践教程程永生.ppt

B) Translation 2: 在联合国之外，人权问题已经在峰会上同七大工业国集团、不结盟运动讨论过了，也已经同美洲国家组织、非统组织、东南亚国家联盟、欧洲联盟、独立国共同体和里约集团讨论过了，在其他地区性和次地区性的论坛上也已经讨论过了。 Comments: The present translation is different from the previous in that by repeating 同……讨论过了with 在……也已经讨论过了as a reinforcement, all the discussion participants are now well organized in an orderly pattern. However, abbreviations could have been used for the names of the international organizations, and other measures could also be taken. C) Translation 3: 人权问题在联合国内外都已经讨论过了。例如，在联合国机构之外，在七国集团和不结盟运动的峰会上，在美洲国家组织、非统、东盟、欧盟、独联体、里约集团中，在重要的地区与次地区论坛上，都已经讨论过了。 Comments: In the present version, abbreviations are used, the repetition of 讨论过了is avoided by repetition of 在….上（中）three times, and addition of人权问题在联合国内外都讨论过了and 例如 for the clarity of the ideas, coherence of the text and improvement on the structure of the translation as a whole. The addition of 在联合国内外, together with the repetition of 讨论过了, is meaningful in that first, the implied meaning is made explicit while the discussion participants are made implicit; second, the translation now assumes an explicit deductive pattern of development, that is, development from general to specific. Original 2: Parallel to this, the High Commissioner has initiated and vigorously pursued the restructuring of the Centre for Human Rights with the aim of ensuring a secretariat capable of providing the highest standards of work to respond effectively to an ever-growing number of mandates and human rights challenges around the world. The Commission on Human Rights is a unique world forum with primary objective being to make the enjoyment of human rights a reality for all people. This can only be achieved by translating principles and norms into concrete deeds affecting the way people live. In doing so, the Commission on human rights can also give greater impetus to the initiatives being undertaken by the High Commissioner. It is essential that the Commission, as the most important forum