2021学年第一学期浙南名校联盟第一次联考读后续写讲评.pptxVIP

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主要问题1.文章没读懂（去当铺卖戒指换钱来给丈夫治病？）2.词汇理解偏3.情节不连贯4.语言基本错误较多：时态混乱，词性误用，单词拼写错误等5.语言表达的积累严重不足Onesuchevening,asIreachedforsomecreamformyhands,Inoticedmybluebirddiamondweddingring-whichIhadwornforalmostforacentury-wasmissing!counter第一段结尾与第二段首句不连贯

第二节读后续写（满分25分）阅读下列短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。ItwasJuly2014.Weweregettingreadytomoveinanewhousewhenmyhusbandbecameveryill.Hehadtospendnineweeksinhospital,leavingmetodoeverythinginournewhome.Bynightfall,Iwasworn-out.Onesuchevening,asIreachedforsomecreamformyhands,Inoticedmybluebirddiamondweddingring-whichIhadwornforalmosthalfacentury-wasmissing!Myfingerwasnaked!Iwasextremelyshockedandsad.Ilookedineverydrawerandinthecar.Noluck.Myfamilytoldmetogobackalongthesameroute.Thatwouldbeatask,forthatdayIhadgoneshopping,gotmycarfixed,andgoneforaneyeexam.

Isat,mindwanderingbackintimewhenIhadfirstmetmyhusband.Iwasfiveandoneday,mydadtookmetothetown.Ontheway,wecameuponalargeherdofcattle.Iwavedtotheyoungestrider,whoseemedtobenine,buthejustturnedaway.Nextmymemorytravelledtomyhighschool,xxxmostexcitingthingthenwastodressupandwalkthestreetsofourtownwithmyclassmates.Itwasonsuchadaythatablackcarwentbyandapassengeryelled,“Girls,wantaridewithus?”Icouldhardlybelieveit:amongthepeopleinthecarwastheboywhohadn’trespondedtomywave13yearsbefore!Buthewasn’tignoringmenow.Ourloveaffairbegan.Heofferedtheringafewmonthslater.xxxdiamondwassmall,butmyfuturehusbandchoseitforitsperfectionandshine.Mydaydreampassed.MydaughtercameandsuggestedIshopforanewring.“Wheredoyouwa