满分写作周周赢 PPTWednesday　考场作文研析 (2).pptx

满分写作周周赢;赢在微点高中英语满分写作周周赢;;读后续写满分技巧16恰当衔接过渡

在续写过程中,根据所设计的情节中的上下文巧妙衔接过渡。①利用恰当的衔接过渡词,如评注性副词gratefully、surprisingly、luckily、fortunately等;②利用介词短语,如toone’ssurprise,toone’sjoy,insurprise等;③利用表并列、转折、因果和序列顺序的单词或短语,如and、but、so、however、onthecontrary等;④利用代词的替代和承上或启下的省略。;;;注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;

2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。

Dennyheldmyhand,butthenmyturncame.

Asmallbodyclimbedontothepianobenchnexttome.

(请参考附录一~五);主题链接;提分步骤1读原文理基本要素和2线;提分步骤2思续写情节“以旧带新”2原则(421原则——4衔接、2情线、1主题;ARE原则—action、response、emotion);提分步骤3思伏笔添细节原续更融洽

捕捉原文所设伏笔,充盈过渡句细节并合理衔接,以使续写段落在逻辑和内容上更符合原文基调。;提分步骤4沿原文特点写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道)

原文语言丰富、地道,如“无灵”主语句描写情感和心理活动(原文①②)。同时运用大量描写具体动作的词语,例如,在描写Denny打扰“我”练琴时,运用crawledoutofbed、padoutof、climbuponthebenchwithme、beganplinking等短语(原文③④⑤),生动地刻画了一个要粘着妈妈,又对钢琴充满好奇的小家伙捣乱的画面。续写时应借鉴和仿效,这样才能与原文语言风格保持一致。;仿效临摹满分手写体Handwritingalsocounts!;范文

Dennyheldmyhand,butthenmyturncame.Ipointedtothepiano,sayingtohim,“Honey,youseethepiano?Momwillbethereplinkinglikeyoudidathome,youstayherelisteningallright?”andthenloosenedhishands.Havingsettledhimintheaudienceseat,Iturnedaroundtothestage,steppedtowardsthepianodeterminedly,andfinallyseatedmyselfinfrontofthepiano.“Itsmellsgood,”Ipondered.Alongwiththefirstnoteofthemusic,Ibeganmyshow.However,itwasnotlongbeforewhisperspulledmebacktotheearth,whichmeantsomethingunusualhadhappened.

Asmallbodyclimbedontothepianobenchnexttome.ItwasDenny!Hiseyeswidenedwithwonderandexcitement,andhewantedtoplinkalongwithme.Ihesitatedforamoment,unsureofwhattodo.ButDenny’ssmallfingersbegantofindthehighkeys,addingtheplinkingintothepiece.IfeltlikeIwasontheeveningroutineasusual.ThenIkeptfocusedonmynotes.T